Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THE BAR CHART ILLUSTRATES THE PROPORTION OF RESIDENTS OF AUSTRALIA IN FIVE DIFFRENT CITIES SYDNEY,MELBOURNE,BRISBANE,ADELAIDE AND HOBART.
OVERALL,VISITING THE CAFE WAS GENERALLY THE MOST VISITING PLACE ACROSS ALL CITIES PARTICULARLY HOBART AND MELBOURNE. IN HOBART THE PERCENTAGE OF THE VISITORS ARE 63% AND IN MELBOURNE THE VISITORS ACCOUNTS OF 64%.WHEREAS BUYING FRESH COFFEE WAS THE LEAST COMMON IN ALL LOCATIONS.
LOOKING TO A DETAIL,GOING TYO A CAFE WAS HIGHEST IN MELBOURNE AND HOBERT.RECORDING OF FIGURE ARE APPROXEMETELY 63% TO 64%. IN SYDNEY AND BRISBANE FOLLOWED WITH AROUND 57% AND 61%.IN ADELAIDE THE PERCENTAGE OF THE CAFE VISITORS ARE 49%.FRESH COFFEE IS THE LEAST COMMON IN ALL THE CITIES AND HAS LESS PERCENTAGE OF VISITORS IN ALL CITIES.
IN CONTRAST THE INSTANT COFFE IS RANGED PURCHASES ABOUT 45% IN SYDNEY 47% IN MELBOURNE,AND 53% IN BRISBANE 50% IN ADELAIBE AND 54% IN HOBART.
IN CONCLUSION THE FRESH COFFEE HAS THE LEAST COOMON VISITORS IN ALL CITIES OF AUSTRALIA.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the survey across the five cities. You successfully highlighted the trends for cafe visits, fresh coffee, and instant coffee. However, the analysis is somewhat repetitive and lacks a more sophisticated synthesis of the data. For instance, while you mention the figures for cafe visits, the comparison between cities could be more integrated. The overview is present but could be more clearly defined as a separate paragraph to better highlight the key trends. Ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed, as there are minor discrepancies between the provided chart and your stated figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'In conclusion' to signal shifts in focus. However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear. For example, the transition between the cafe visit data and the fresh coffee data feels abrupt. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the comparison of the five cities.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the main points clearly. You use city names and categories correctly. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'DIFFRENT', 'APPROXEMETELY', 'ADELAIBE', and 'COOMON', which detract from the professional tone. Additionally, the range of vocabulary is somewhat limited; you rely heavily on basic terms like 'percentage' and 'visitors'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', 'highest', and 'lowest', and ensure careful proofreading to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent errors in punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and periods. There are also grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'the visitors accounts of 64%' instead of 'the visitors account for 64%' and 'the instant coffe is ranged purchases'. These errors are noticeable but do not completely impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentence structures are grammatically sound before moving on to more complex forms.
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