Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This diagram illustrates that in Australia there are 2 types if community buy coffee and tea is a drinking Habits in Australian 5 cities. summarize the information in report in which how much percentage of people buy fresh coffee.
instant coffee and tea or coffee in last 4 weeks in Australia
In Sydney and Melbourne, city having the almost same percentage of people drinking habits the 43% of people habit to buy a fresh coffee, it shows little spike 45% of people buy a instant coffee and having a massive increase 62% of people went to cafe for tea or coffee in last 4 weeks
In Brisbane and Adelaide city having the same percentage of people drinking habits to buy a fresh coffee it almost 36
in last 4 weeks and having a 52 percentage of people habit to buy instant coffee and having a little decrease in Adelaide 50 % people buy a instant coffee in last 4 weeks. the 55% of people went to cafe for tea and coffee
in Hobart 35% people buy fresh coffee and 53% of people buy instant coffee or 62% Of people went to cafe for coffee and tea in last 4 weeks
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the data provided, but it fails to provide a clear overview or identify the most significant trends. The information is presented as a list of city-by-city statistics rather than a cohesive summary. There is no clear comparison between the cities, and the data points are often presented in a fragmented manner. For instance, the report mentions percentages for Sydney and Melbourne but fails to synthesize these into a broader trend. The introduction is also poorly constructed, as it repeats the prompt instructions rather than paraphrasing the chart's purpose. To improve, you must group data logically and highlight the most striking differences or similarities across all five cities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the internal flow of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text feel like a series of isolated statements rather than a coherent report. For example, the transition between the description of Brisbane/Adelaide and Hobart is abrupt. Furthermore, the referencing is often unclear, as the text jumps between cities without providing a clear framework for the reader to follow. Improving the use of linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'similarly,' or 'whereas' would significantly enhance the readability and logical progression of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'people habit to buy' or 'people buy,' which are not natural collocations. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'community buy coffee' and 'city having the almost same percentage.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data effectively; for example, instead of 'massive increase' or 'little spike,' you should use more precise academic terminology like 'a significant proportion' or 'a marginal rise.' To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of descriptive verbs and nouns related to data analysis.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('city having the almost same percentage'), incorrect sentence fragments, and awkward phrasing ('is a drinking Habits in Australian 5 cities'). The use of articles and prepositions is inconsistent throughout the text. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and tense consistency.
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