Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph illustrates the outcomes of a survey about the individuals coffee and tea purchasing and drinking habits in different Australian cities.
Firstly, in Sydney, the majority of people preferred to visit to cafe for coffee and tea which was around 62 percent. The difference of nearly 2 percent seen people purchased fresh and instant coffee in Sydney. The percentage of individuals went to cafe for coffee and tea was at peak in Melbourne. The customers of instant coffee was approximately 10 percent more than fresh coffee in Melbourne.
The proportion of consumers of fresh, instant coffee and visited to cafe was near about 34, 53 and 56 respectively, in Brisbane. The count of people was similar for bought instant coffee and went to cafe which was approximately 50 percent in Adelaide. In Hobart, the number of people preferred to drinl fresh coffee was least and individuals visited to cafe was higest proportion.
Overall, majority of people preferred to visit cafe fot coffee and tea, while least people liked to buy fresh coffee in different cities of Australia.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the popularity of cafes in Melbourne and the trends in Brisbane and Adelaide. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you attempted a summary at the end, it is somewhat repetitive and lacks the necessary synthesis of the data. Furthermore, some data points are presented in a way that is difficult to follow, such as the vague reference to 'near about 34, 53 and 56 respectively' without clearly linking these to the specific categories (fresh, instant, cafe). To improve, ensure you group data logically and provide a more distinct, comparative overview in the introduction or conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is sometimes mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally awkward, such as 'The difference of nearly 2 percent seen people purchased'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track which city or category is being discussed. For example, the transition between the description of Sydney and Melbourne is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Similarly', 'Regarding') and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the flow and readability of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'visited to cafe' (should be 'visited cafes') and 'drinl' (a spelling error). The repetition of 'people' and 'individuals' makes the text feel somewhat limited. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'segment', 'preference', or 'consumption patterns', and ensure that collocations are accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('visited to cafe'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction ('The difference of nearly 2 percent seen people purchased'). Subject-verb agreement is also inconsistent, as seen in 'customers of instant coffee was'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence structure and proofreading for basic errors will help improve your score.
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