Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The information about results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities is demonstrated by bar graph.
Overall, it is crystal clear that the highest ratio of coffee and tea in Melbourne. regarding went to a cafeteria for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks. However the least was in Brisbane about bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks.
To begin with, the highest percentage of coffee and tea in Melbourne in went to a cafeteria for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks. Whereas, 35% of coffee and tea in Brisbane in bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks. In addition, the similar proportion of coffee and tea in Sydney in bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks and bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks was approximately 45%. Surprisingly, 50% of coffee and tea in Adelaide in bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks, which was 17% more than the bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks.
Moving towards the rest of the information, the percentile of coffee and tea in Hobart in bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks was 54%. Eventually, the rate of coffee and tea in Sydney, Brisbane, Hobart in bought fresh and coffee in last 4 weeks was 55%, 65% and 67%, respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task, but the presentation of data is frequently confusing and inaccurate. While you identify some trends, the report lacks a clear overview of the main features. The data points cited are often difficult to follow, such as the claim that 50% of people in Adelaide bought instant coffee, which is presented without clear context. Furthermore, the report fails to effectively compare the five cities, often listing figures in a disjointed manner. To improve, focus on grouping data logically (e.g., by category of coffee/tea habit) rather than city by city, and ensure that the figures reported accurately reflect the visual data provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the awkward transition 'Moving towards the rest of the information'. The referencing is frequently confusing, making it hard for the reader to track which city or habit is being discussed. For example, the sentence 'the highest percentage of coffee and tea in Melbourne in went to a cafeteria' is grammatically disjointed and lacks a clear logical link to the previous paragraph. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence clearly refers to a specific subject would significantly enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the phrasing provided in the prompt. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'highest ratio of coffee and tea' instead of 'highest percentage of people' and 'percentile' used incorrectly to refer to a percentage. The phrasing 'in went to a cafeteria' is unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'proportion', 'figure', 'majority', or 'significant', and ensure that these terms are used in the correct context to describe statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with sentence structure, such as 'the highest ratio of coffee and tea in Melbourne. regarding went to a cafeteria', which is a sentence fragment. Preposition usage is also problematic, as seen in 'in went to a cafeteria' and 'in bought fresh coffee'. The lack of correct subject-verb agreement and the misuse of articles make the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—and practice the correct use of prepositions when describing statistical trends.
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