Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given vertical column graph represents the people who lives in different cities in Australia buying tea and coffee and drinking habits in the graph we seen five cities named Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart. The data has been calibrated into percentage.
Overall, it is crystal clear that the people of Sydney went to the cafe more than the other cities and Brisbane is more less than other cities who went to cafe in last 4 weeks. Melbourne people percentage is more than 40% and buy fresh coffee and Brisbane who went to cafe less than 35% and they buy fresh coffee. At a fleeting glance Melbourne,Hobart and Sydney people went to cafe for coffee or tea more than 60% in last 4 weeks. people in Hobart and Brisbane bought instant coffee more than 50% and Sydney, Melbourne and Adelaide bought instant coffee less than 50%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some main features, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, structured overview of the data. You have attempted to compare the cities, but the reporting of figures is occasionally confusing (e.g., 'more less than other cities'). To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive summary of the data trends and ensure the response meets the length requirement to allow for full development of the main features. The current lack of depth and the under-length nature of the response prevent it from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks clear paragraphing, which is essential for organizing information in Task 1. The ideas are presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, making the progression of information difficult to follow. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices, they are often used mechanically or incorrectly, such as 'At a fleeting glance'. To improve, you should organize your report into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific trends or comparisons. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'whereas') would help improve the logical flow between sentences and ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic phrasing such as 'people of' and 'went to the cafe'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'more less than' and 'calibrated into percentage'. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'figure', 'majority', or 'minority'. Additionally, try to vary your verbs when describing trends, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'surpassed' to demonstrate a more sophisticated range of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people who lives') and sentence structure (e.g., 'in the graph we seen five cities'). The sentence construction is largely simple, and there is a lack of complex structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Incorporating more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, will help demonstrate a wider grammatical range. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms is also highly recommended.
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