Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities.
The first given country is sydney In sydney 43% of citizens bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks. whereas exactly 45% of people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks meanwhile 60% of citizens preferred going to the cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks. The next country associated with production of coffee is melbourne, In melbourne around 42% of people bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks whereas 48-50% of citizens liked instant coffee in last 4 weeks whereas 63% of indiviuals went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.
The third country associated with the production of coffee is brisbane in the given city around 34% of citizens bought fresh coffee in last four weeks whereas 52% of indiviuals bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks meanwhile 55% of indiviuals went to a cafe or coffee or tea in last 4 weeks. whereas the fourth country associated with production of coffee is adelaisde. in adelaide 35% of citizens preferred buying fresh coffee in last four weeks whereas 50% of people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks whereas 48% of humans went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks. other than this, 38% of people bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks whereras 55% of indiviuals preferred buying instant coffee in last 4 weeks other than this, 38% of people in hobart bought fresh coffee in last four weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, but it lacks a clear overview or summary of the trends. The information is presented as a list of city-by-city statistics rather than a comparative analysis. The student incorrectly refers to cities as 'countries' and 'production' centers, which shows a misunderstanding of the data. While the figures are generally accurate, the lack of synthesis and the failure to highlight significant differences or groupings (e.g., comparing the highest and lowest figures across all cities) limits the score. To improve, you must provide a clear summary paragraph that identifies the most striking trends before detailing specific data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is poorly structured. It lacks a clear introduction and a concluding summary. The paragraphing is inconsistent, with the final paragraph being fragmented and incomplete. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical; the word 'whereas' is used excessively to link every clause, which makes the text feel monotonous and difficult to follow. There is no logical progression between the cities, and the referencing is sometimes unclear. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus rather than just listing data points sequentially.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrases like 'bought fresh coffee' and 'went to a cafe'. There are also significant errors in word choice, such as referring to Australian cities as 'countries' and incorrectly using the term 'production of coffee' to describe consumer habits. The repetition of 'citizens' and 'individuals' also suggests a limited range. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'majority', 'minority', and 'fluctuated'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding punctuation and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper capitalization, such as 'In sydney 43%...'. There is a lack of variety in sentence structures, with most sentences following a simple 'subject-verb-object' pattern. Additionally, there are errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. The final paragraph is particularly problematic, as it is incomplete and lacks proper sentence boundaries. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence punctuation and attempt to use more complex structures, such as relative clauses or participial phrases, to combine related ideas.
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