Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart illustrates the outcome of a survey about coffee and tea buying and drinking habits of people's in various cities of Australia
Overall, in every cities more than 40 percent of peoples went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks. And Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart had the highest number of people's that went to a cafe for coffee or tea.
Although Melbourne had the same percentage of people as Sydney that bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks but Sydney has the highest percent of peoples between 40 to 45 percent. with 50 to 55 percent of people Hobart has the highest number of people that bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks. Adelaide had the lowest percent of people that went to cafe for coffee or tea with less than 50 percent.
Eventually Brisbane had same percent of people as Adelaide who bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, such as identifying the cities with the highest and lowest participation rates. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, structured approach to comparing the three categories (cafe visits, fresh coffee, and instant coffee). While you mention specific cities, the data reporting is occasionally imprecise, such as stating '40 to 45 percent' without clearly linking it to the specific category or city. To improve, ensure you group the data logically—perhaps by category or by city—and provide more precise comparisons between the figures to fully satisfy the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is somewhat mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited, relying heavily on simple conjunctions like 'and' or 'although'. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Furthermore, the final sentence ('Eventually Brisbane had...') is disconnected from the rest of the text, suggesting a lack of logical progression. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Similarly,' 'Regarding...') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There is frequent repetition of phrases such as 'number of people's' and 'percent of people'. The word 'peoples' is used incorrectly throughout; 'people' is already plural and does not require an 's'. Additionally, the phrasing 'outcome of a survey' is slightly unnatural in this context. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'proportion,' 'percentage,' 'figures,' or 'data,' and avoid repetitive structures by using synonyms and varied sentence openings.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include incorrect pluralization ('peoples'), missing articles ('in last 4 weeks'), and awkward sentence construction ('in every cities'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences ending abruptly or lacking necessary commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions to improve accuracy.
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