Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart give information the result of a survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Overall, the first Australian city highest buying coffee, tea, and drinking habits in Melbourne cafe for last 4 week 63% and lowest Brisbane fresh coffee 34%.
Starting with, The first Australian city is Sydney bought fresh coffee, and tea in last 4 weeks is 61% and the next Melbourne city highest went to a cafe for coffee, tea in last 4 weeks is 64% and Brisbane is 55%. and next Adelaide 49%. next Hobart 63%.
Secondly, The information by Sydney bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks is 45%. and Melbourne 49%. next Brisbane bought instant coffee 53%. And Hobart 54%.
Thirdly,The Five Australian cities, is information by bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is first city Sydney 44% and Melbourne 42% next city Brisbane 34% and the end of city is Hobart is 39%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or effectively highlight the main trends. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the comparisons are often confusing or inaccurate (e.g., 'the first Australian city highest buying coffee'). The data points are listed rather than synthesized, and there is a lack of focus on significant features or meaningful contrasts between the five cities. To improve, you should group the data logically and focus on identifying the highest and lowest points across categories rather than listing percentages city by city.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'Starting with,' 'Secondly,' and 'Thirdly,' which do not logically connect the data points. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which city or category is being discussed. The lack of smooth transitions between sentences and paragraphs hinders the overall flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'The bar chart give information the result' instead of 'The bar chart provides information about the results.' The lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language restricts the ability to convey the data precisely. You need to expand your range of vocabulary to include terms related to trends and comparisons.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The bar chart give'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. The writing relies almost exclusively on simple sentences, and attempts at more complex structures are often faulty or incomplete. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces and misused periods. A focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your score.
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