Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrates a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits of five Australian cities.
Firstly coming to Sydney, the percentage of buying fresh coffee in last last 4 weeks is nearly 45, coming to purchasing of instant coffee in last 4 weeks is around 45 percent and looking after going to cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is nearly 60 percent.
Secondly looking at Melbourne, in last 4 weeks, buying fresh coffee, instant coffee and going to cafe for coffee or tea is around 40, 50 and 65 percentage of residents respectively.
Thirdly coming to Brisbane, in last 4 weeks it has around 35, 55 and 55 percentage of this city residents are in buying fresh coffee, instant coffee and going cafe for coffee or tea respectively.
Coming Adelaide, in last 4 weeks it shown almost 35, 50 and 55 percent of this city residents are in buying of fresh coffee, instant coffee and going to cafe for coffee or tea respectively.
Lastly coming to Hobart, in last 4 week approximately 40, 55 and 65 percentage of this city residents are in the buying fresh coffee, instant coffee and been to cafe for coffee and tea.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the three categories across five cities. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is a requirement for Band 6 and above. The information is presented as a list of data points for each city rather than a comparative analysis. While the data is accurate, the lack of synthesis (e.g., noting that cafe visits were consistently the highest category across all cities) limits the score. To improve, you should group the data by trends rather than listing each city individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Thirdly' to structure the paragraphs. However, the progression is mechanical and repetitive. The referencing is often unclear, and the paragraphing is somewhat disjointed. The text relies heavily on a list-like structure, which hinders the flow of information. To reach a higher band, you should use more varied linking words and phrases to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs, and ensure that the structure supports a logical comparison rather than just a sequential reporting of data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases such as 'buying fresh coffee', 'instant coffee', and 'going to cafe' are repeated throughout the text without variation. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'looking after going to cafe' and 'it shown almost'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To improve, try to use synonyms and more sophisticated reporting verbs or nouns to describe the data, such as 'purchasing habits', 'frequenting cafes', or 'the proportion of residents'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on a very limited range of sentence structures, mostly simple sentences or lists. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'in last last 4 weeks', 'it has around 35, 55 and 55 percentage', and 'been to cafe'. The use of 'percentage' is often incorrect, as the figures refer to the percentage itself, not the count. The lack of complex structures and the presence of persistent errors in basic grammar and article usage significantly impact the clarity of the writing.
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