Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the consequences of a survey about individuals coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five different Australian cities.
Overall, Hobart city recorded the highest share in Australia, who people like to visited cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks. Secondly bought instant coffee largest proportion of Australia. Brisbane had the lowest percentage which their people liked bought free coffee in last 4 weeks.
On the one hand, Hobart accounted for largest proportion, which people often went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks approximately 63%. Furthermore, in last 4 weeks people bought instant coffee in Hobart almost 55%, while Adelaide was experienced biggest share at 50% . who people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks.
Turning to the next details, Brisbane had the lowest share people went outside for drinking coffee or tea. Melbourne recorded the highest percentage because their individuals went to a cafe fro coffee and tea in last 4 weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles with accuracy and clarity. While you identify some trends, the reporting of figures is often confusing or contradictory. For instance, you state Hobart had the highest share for cafe visits, but later mention Melbourne recorded the highest percentage. Furthermore, the description of 'buying fresh coffee' is unclear as the chart likely refers to 'fresh coffee' rather than 'free coffee'. To improve, ensure you carefully cross-reference the data points with the visual information and avoid contradictory statements. The overview is present but lacks a clear, accurate summary of the main trends across all categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is frequently interrupted by unclear referencing and awkward phrasing. Phrases like 'Turning to the next details' and 'On the one hand' are used, but they do not always connect the ideas effectively. There are also issues with sentence structure that make the flow disjointed, such as the fragmented sentences in the second and third paragraphs (e.g., 'who people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks'). Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each sentence follows logically from the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'share', 'percentage', and 'people'. There are also instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'consequences' instead of 'findings' or 'results', and 'fro' instead of 'for'. The misuse of 'free coffee' instead of 'fresh coffee' suggests a lack of attention to the specific labels in the chart. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for data trends (e.g., 'proportion', 'figure', 'percentage', 'rate') and ensure you are accurately transcribing the categories provided in the prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement and sentence construction, such as 'who people like to visited' and 'their people liked bought'. Many sentences are grammatically incomplete or incorrectly structured, which makes the text difficult to follow. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Focusing on basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—and proofreading for tense consistency will help you improve your accuracy.
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