Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the consequences of a survey about individual's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five different Australian cities.
Overall, Hobart city recorded the highest share in Australia, who people like to visit cafe for coffee or tea in the 4 weeks. Secondly bought instant coffee largest proportion of Australia. Brisbane had the lowest percentage which their people liked to buy free coffee in last 4 weeks.
On the one hand, Hobart accounted for the largest proportion, which people often went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks approximately 63%. Furthermore, in last 4 weeks people bought instant coffee in Hobart almost 55%, while Adelaide experienced biggest share at 50% . Who people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks.
Turning to the next details, Brisbane had the lowest share people went outside for drinking coffee or tea. Melbourne recorded the highest percentage because their individuals went to a cafe fro coffee and tea in last 4 weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles with accuracy and clarity. While you identify some trends, the reporting of figures is often confusing or incorrect, such as stating Hobart had the highest share of instant coffee at 55% when the data shows otherwise. The overview is poorly constructed, as it lacks a clear summary of the main trends, instead listing specific, disjointed points. Furthermore, the interpretation of the categories (e.g., 'buy free coffee') is inaccurate, suggesting a misunderstanding of the chart labels. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant differences and similarities rather than listing individual data points without context.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'On the one hand' and 'Turning to the next details,' which do not logically connect the information provided. Referencing is frequently unclear, particularly in sentences like 'Who people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks,' which lacks a clear subject and disrupts the flow. The lack of logical links between sentences makes it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the five cities. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring clear subject-verb agreement will enhance coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'share,' 'percentage,' and 'highest/lowest,' which are appropriate but insufficient for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'consequences of a survey' (instead of 'results') and 'buy free coffee' (which is likely a misreading of 'fresh coffee'). Some phrasing is unnatural, such as 'their people liked to buy.' To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion,' 'figure,' 'accounted for,' and 'experienced,' while ensuring they are used in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as fragments ('Who people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks') and incorrect relative clauses ('Hobart city recorded the highest share in Australia, who people like to visit'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there are errors with prepositions and articles throughout the text. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. Focusing on basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and a finite verb—will help reduce these errors and improve your overall accuracy.
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