Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This graph shows the result of a survey about individuals of coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. it is advert that went to the coffee shop for buying that coffee in last four weeks dominated instead of bought fresh coffee in last four weeks.
Moreover in first graph it is comparison of buying coffee in Sydney. Additionally the visit to the coffee shop and buy coffee from there increased . Meanwhile the middle graph of the same city stood at 45%. And the smallest stood at 43% from where people bough fresh coffee.
At second graph it gradually rose the graph in which man kinds went to the shop or enjoyed their coffee gradually increased at 65% afterward the middle one graph rose at 48%. Consequently the last one stood at 43%. Subsequently the third graph gradually weak. in which the folks who are going to shop or getting their coffee that graph stood at 55%. Instead of the center graph stood at 54% an the last one is weakest stood at 34% in Brisbane .At forth graph the percentage of the people who went to the coffee shop and who buy fresh is smilar. At fifth and the last graph
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to provide a clear overview of the data and struggles to identify the main features or significant trends. The description is fragmented and confusing, often referring to 'first graph' or 'second graph' rather than the specific cities or categories provided in the prompt. Many figures are mentioned without context, making it difficult for the reader to understand the comparison between coffee and tea habits. The response is incomplete, ending abruptly without summarizing the final data points. Consequently, the information is not effectively selected or reported, and the comparison is largely absent.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are attempts to use cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Additionally', and 'Consequently', they are often used incorrectly or do not connect ideas logically. The paragraphing is non-existent or poorly managed, and the progression of information is disjointed. The frequent references to 'graphs' instead of the actual data categories create confusion. The text does not flow well, and the lack of a clear introduction or conclusion makes the overall arrangement difficult to follow. The referencing is unclear throughout the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'man kinds' and 'folks' are inappropriate for an academic report. There is significant repetition of basic words such as 'graph', 'stood', and 'increased'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe data trends, relying on vague descriptions like 'gradually weak' or 'middle one graph'. Word choice errors, such as 'advert' instead of 'evident' and 'bough' instead of 'bought', occur frequently, which occasionally impedes the reader's ability to grasp the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning. Sentence structures are often incomplete or run-on, such as 'At fifth and the last graph'. There is a lack of control over basic syntax, including subject-verb agreement and preposition usage (e.g., 'went to the coffee shop for buying that coffee'). Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic spacing and missing commas. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are almost always faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. The majority of sentences contain errors.
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