Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chat illustrates the outcomes of a survey about individuals coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Overall, the highest percentage of coffee and drinking habitats in Melbourne, and the lowest percentage of coffee and drinking habitats in Adelaide. In contrast the significantly changes in Brisbane and Hobart.
In proportion of city residents are significantly increased through the period. In Sydney the residents bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is almost 44% and in Melbourne in significantly decreased in 42%. And bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks is 45% and it gradually rose in 47%. And went to a café for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is 62% and increased sharply in 64%. Furthermore, In Brisbane, bought fresh coffee is declined in 34% and in Adelaide it rose in 34%. and bought instant coffee is rose dramatically 53% and it drop off 50%. and went to a coffee is slightly grow in 55% and in minor declined in 44%.
In Hobart, bought fresh coffee is significantly drop in 42% and bought instant coffee is all over the cities is gradually rose in 54% and went to a café is 61%. Consequently, the highest percentage is Melbourne in all over the cities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The main features are not effectively highlighted, and the reporting of figures is often confusing or contradictory (e.g., stating Melbourne has the highest percentage while also noting decreases). The information is presented in a disjointed manner, making it difficult to identify the key trends across the five cities. To improve, you should focus on grouping data logically—such as comparing the three categories (fresh coffee, instant coffee, café visits) across cities—rather than listing figures city by city without a clear analytical purpose. The summary lacks the necessary synthesis required for a Band 6 or higher.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical progression of ideas. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and often incorrectly (e.g., 'In contrast the significantly changes', 'Consequently, the highest percentage is Melbourne'). The referencing is frequently unclear, and the transition between sentences is abrupt. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and use linking words more naturally to connect related ideas. The current structure makes it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'drinking habitats' instead of 'habits', 'significantly decreased in 42%' instead of 'decreased to 42%', and 'went to a coffee' instead of 'visited a café'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the information being presented. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more precise terminology for describing data trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'accounted for') and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, preposition usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'In proportion of city residents are significantly increased', 'bought fresh coffee is declined'). Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear subject. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of control over grammar. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verb tenses and prepositions are used accurately when describing statistical data.
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