Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph compares people's habit of purchasing fresh coffee, instant coffee and goint to a cafe for having a coffee or tea in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane Adelaide and Hobart in last 4 weeks.
Overall fresh coffee is the most favourite among all these cities except Adelaide with instant coffee as most purchased item. Instant coffeee is the second most favourite, while going to cafe is the leat priority of people.
In Sydeney more than 60% of individuals prefer to byu a fresh coffee, while 45% of coustomers consume instant coffee. However, 44% of people go to cafe.
Melbourne is the most prominent in purchasing fresh coffee with 64% customers and 48% individuals prefer to use instant coffee, only 42% people goes to cafes.
In Brisbane 55% of individuals drink fresh coffee, on the other hand 53% customers uses instant coffee and only 34% consumers went to cafes.
Adelaide, is the only city with major consumers of instant coffee which is 50% very close to fresh coffee with 49% consumers.However, cafes are the least dominant with 34% customers.
Hobart follows the patters of major cities with highest number of frresh coffee consumers around 63%, while 54% customers uses instant coffee and 37% people go to cafe
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the data and provided relevant comparisons across the five cities. The overview clearly highlights the general trends regarding fresh coffee, instant coffee, and cafe visits. However, the response lacks a clear structure in the body paragraphs, and some data points are presented as a list rather than a synthesis. To reach a higher band, ensure you group the data more effectively to highlight trends rather than just listing percentages for each city. The inclusion of all cities and categories is good, but the analysis could be more analytical by focusing on the most significant differences and similarities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. For instance, you rely heavily on simple transitions like 'In Sydney', 'Melbourne is', and 'In Brisbane'. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. Improving the variety of your cohesive devices and ensuring a logical progression of ideas will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat limited and repetitive. You use basic terms like 'favourite', 'purchased', and 'people' repeatedly. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'goint', 'coffeee', 'leat', 'Sydeney', 'byu', 'coustomers', and 'patters'. These errors, while not always impeding communication, are frequent enough to affect the overall impression. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'proportion', 'marginal', or 'fluctuation', and pay closer attention to your spelling and word choice.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('only 42% people goes to cafes', '53% customers uses instant coffee') and incorrect preposition usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for basic grammatical slips will help you achieve a more accurate and professional tone.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.