Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph present the outcome that is taken from opinions for coffee and tea purchasing and drinking routines of persons. The information is from five Australian cities.
Overall, the chart shows highest 60 percent people in last 4 weeks went to cafe for coffee or tea in three cities Hobart, Melbourn, and Sydney. The people who bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is 33% from Adelaide and Brisbane.
The main 4 cities in the higher percentage of buying and drinking coffee and tea habits are Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Adelaide. The people who have bought instant coffee in the last couple of weeks are 55% from the Hobart city, and the graph shows lowest 45 percent from the city Sydney.
On the other hand, people who have bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks are 43% from the city of Sydney, and the people from Brisbane bought 33% of fresh coffee.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or effectively highlight the main trends. While it mentions some figures, the selection of data is somewhat disjointed and lacks a logical comparison between the five cities. The report is fragmented, and the information provided is not always accurate or clearly linked to the categories (e.g., 'highest 60 percent' is vague). To improve, you should group the data more logically—perhaps by category (fresh coffee, instant coffee, cafe visits)—and ensure that the comparisons are precise and easy to follow. The response lacks a cohesive summary of the most significant differences or similarities across the cities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical and lacks logical progression. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'The people who...'. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific, clearly defined aspect of the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple phrasing like 'people who have bought' and 'the city of'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the outcome that is taken from opinions' instead of 'survey results'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning, it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. To improve, try to use more varied terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'consumption', and 'preference', and avoid repeating the same sentence structures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The bar graph present', 'The people... is 33%') and awkward phrasing ('the chart shows highest 60 percent people'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often simple or contain errors that slightly impede the flow of information. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and punctuation. Additionally, try to incorporate more complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.
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