Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in Australian cities. The one side shows the percentage of city residents and the another side shows the cities names.

The first hand side Sydney have bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks with the percentage of 44 and the instant coffee in last 4 weeks is 46%.

They have third percentage of coffee is 61% in the went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.

The Second hands side shows the melbourne city with his three percentages. The first bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks in melbourne is 43% and the second one is having 48%.

The last city residents in melbourne is 64% and this percentage is the higher with the other's, Melbourne have total 3 ways of increasing and decreasing levels with the perfect percentages.

The other cities is having different and rising and down with the different percentages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a clear overview or identify the main trends across the five cities. Instead, it focuses on listing specific percentages for only two cities (Sydney and Melbourne), ignoring the remaining data entirely. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the lack of a summary or meaningful comparison means the task requirements are not fully met. To improve, you must group data logically, highlight significant differences or similarities, and ensure all parts of the chart are addressed rather than just selecting isolated figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. Paragraphs are poorly structured, and the transition between ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas, making the text difficult to follow. For instance, phrases like 'The first hand side' and 'The Second hands side' are unnatural and do not effectively guide the reader through the data. To improve, use linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'whereas' to connect your observations and ensure each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic phrasing such as 'the percentage of' and 'the first one is having.' There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'The first hand side' and 'the higher with the other's,' which are not appropriate for an academic report. To achieve a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'proportion,' 'figure,' 'exceeded,' or 'remained consistent,' and avoid informal or inaccurate phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The other cities is having'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'They have third percentage of coffee is 61%'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of articles and prepositions. You should also aim to vary your sentence structure by using complex sentences correctly.

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