Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the bar chart illustrates the result of survey on the coffee and tea drinking habits in five australia cities over the previous four week
overall visiting cafes and tea was the most popular in all cities while buying fresh coffee was hobart by the higher proportion of people than fresh coffee in every city paragraph 1around 61/of the people in sydney had visited a cafe drinking a last four weeks compared with 44/who purchased fresh coffee melbourne where nearly 63/want to cafes while about 49/and 43 instant fresh coffee paragraph 2 in brisbane cafe visit s accounted for 55/only higher than the figure 34/fresh coffee
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 105 words. This significantly impacts the task achievement, as the data is not fully reported or compared. While you identify some main features, such as cafe visits being popular, the analysis is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of all five cities. The inclusion of labels like 'paragraph 1' and 'paragraph 2' within the text is inappropriate for a formal report. To improve, you must ensure all data points are covered, provide a clear summary of trends, and meet the length requirement to allow for sufficient development of ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization is fragmented and lacks a logical flow. The use of headings like 'paragraph 1' and 'paragraph 2' disrupts the text and indicates a lack of understanding of formal report structure. Cohesive devices are largely absent, making the transition between ideas abrupt. The sentences are often disjointed, and there is no clear progression of information. To improve, you should use linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'meanwhile') to connect your ideas and organize your report into clear, cohesive paragraphs without using meta-labels.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'drinking a last four weeks' instead of 'in the last four weeks' and 'instant fresh coffee' which is unclear. The use of '61/of' and '44/' is non-standard and confusing. You need to expand your range of vocabulary to describe data trends accurately, using terms like 'proportion', 'percentage', 'majority', or 'minority' correctly. Focus on using precise terminology related to statistics and trends rather than relying on basic descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'buying fresh coffee was hobart by the higher proportion', which is syntactically incorrect. Punctuation is inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—and then work on incorporating complex structures like relative clauses or comparative forms to improve your range and accuracy.
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