Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

THE BAR GRAPH ILLUSTRATES ABOUT A SURVEY AT WHAT PROPORTION OF PEOPLE'S HABIT ABOUT DRINKING AND PURCHASING EITHER COFFEE OR TEA IN SYDNEY, MELBOURNE, BRISBANE, ADELAIDE AND HOBART IN A LAST MONTH.

OVERALL, THERE IS LEAST NUMBER OF CITIZENS PREFER BOUGHT FRESH COFFEE IN ALL THE CITIES WHILE, A PROPORTION OF PEOPLE WHO WENT TO A CAFE FOR COFFEE OR TEA IS AT THE TOP OF ALL IN ALL TOWNS EXCEPT ADELAIDE CITY.

TO BEGINS WITH, A FRESH COFFEE WAS LESS PREFERABLE OPTION TO WHICH IS CHOSEN BY ALL CITIES RESIDENTIALS WHICH AT SYDNEY APPROX 44%, MELBOURNE IS AT ABOVE 40%, IN BRISBANE AND ADELAIDE IT'S ALMOST SAME AROUND 35% AND HOBART IS CLOSELY AT 40%. WHILE, A PERCENTAGE OF INDIVIDUALS WHO BOUGHT INSTANT COFFEE IS AT 45%, NEARLY 47%, AT HALF IN BETWEEN 50% AND 55%, EXCEAT 50% AND AT EDGE OF 55% RESPECTIVELY TO ALL TOWNS.

WHILE, THE HIGHEST PROPORTION OF LOCALIEST WHO PREFER TO WENT A CAFE FOR TO PURCHASED A COFFEE OR TEA THE NUMBER IS IN SYDNEY IT WAS ACROSS 60% AND IN MELBOURNE AND HOBART IS NOT SO FAR IT BOTH WERE AT AROUND 64% AND CLOSE TO 50% IN ADELAIDE.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, including the three categories across the five cities. However, the reporting of data is often imprecise and confusing. For instance, phrases like 'at edge of 55%' or 'across 60%' make it difficult for the reader to interpret the actual figures. While the overview identifies the general trends, the lack of clarity in data presentation and the inclusion of some inaccurate descriptions of the chart's content prevent a higher score. The response addresses the requirements of the task but lacks the precision expected for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect, such as 'To begins with' and 'While, the highest proportion'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between ideas feels forced. The logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures, which makes the flow of information less smooth than required for a higher band. Paragraphing is present, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs significant improvement.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'localiest' instead of 'locals' or 'residents', and 'fresh coffee was less preferable option to which is chosen by all cities residentials'. The word 'localiest' is not a standard English term. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but the persistent errors in word formation and the lack of precision in describing statistical trends limit the score. More variety and better control over word forms are needed.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('there is least number of citizens prefer'), incorrect verb forms ('prefer to went a cafe'), and awkward sentence construction. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty and lead to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the misuse of commas. The errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the data. A greater focus on basic grammatical accuracy is required before moving to more complex structures.

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