Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart illustrates the results of a survey about menties coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian citizen. first of all,the coffee in sydney bouth fresh coffee in last 4 weeks near 45% and bought instant coffee in last fore weeks on 45% and third went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks people only 60% and it is a high.second of all, in Melbourne fresh coffee in last fore weeks nearly 45% and instant coffee last 4 weeks 45% and people went to cafe for coffee and tea only nearly 65%. thirdly in Brisbane fresh coffee last 4 weeks only 33% and instant coffee near by 555 and cafe coffee or tea 55%.and fourthly in adelaide frish coffee near35%and instant coffee50% and ca

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. The summary is incomplete, as the text cuts off abruptly while describing the fourth city, Adelaide, and fails to mention the fifth city entirely. While there is an attempt to report data for Sydney, Melbourne, and Brisbane, the lack of a clear overview and the incomplete nature of the report mean that the main features are not adequately highlighted or compared. To improve, you must ensure you complete the entire task and provide a clear summary of the overall trends rather than just listing data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisation is mechanical and lacks logical flow. While you use transition words like 'first of all', 'second of all', and 'thirdly', these are used in a repetitive and simplistic manner. The paragraphing is non-existent, as the entire response is written as a single block of text. Furthermore, the abrupt ending makes the progression of ideas impossible to follow. To improve, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs—for example, one for an overview and one or two for detailed comparisons—and use a wider variety of cohesive devices to link your sentences more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'menties' (likely meant to be 'people's'), 'bouth' (bought), 'fore' (four), and 'frish' (fresh). The use of '555' instead of '55%' is a significant error that impedes clarity. To reach a higher band, you need to use a broader range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for', and ensure you proofread your work to correct basic spelling and typographical errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that often make the text difficult to understand. There is a lack of sentence variety, and many sentences are fragmented or lack proper structure, such as 'people only 60% and it is a high.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. You rely on simple, repetitive sentence structures that do not demonstrate an ability to use complex grammar. To improve, focus on writing complete, grammatically correct sentences with proper subject-verb agreement and ensure you use punctuation correctly to separate your ideas.

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