Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar graph represents five Australian cities Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart about habits of individual drinking coffee or tea.
Overall, mostly people went to cafe for coffee or tea whereas only some people bought fresh coffee in last month. Moreover, instant coffee shows a slight increase in last 4 weeks.
In details, in Sydney around 61% of people went to cafe to drink coffee or tea whereas, in Melbourne demand of coffee or tea in cafes are slightly high. However, in Brisbane it slow down to 55% and in Adelaide it decreased to less than 50%. In Hobart it suddenly increased to around 63% in last 4 weeks.
Furthermore, in Sydney people preffer to bought instant coffee rather than fresh coffee. In addition, in Melbourne demand of instant coffee around 48% which was slightly higher than fresh coffee. Whereas, in Brisbane, there was a huge differance between demand of instant coffee and fresh coffee. Moreover, in Adelaide 34% people like to bought fresh coffee and 50% of people bought instant coffee. In Hobart, around 54% loved to bought instant coffee and around 39% bought fresh coffee in last month.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the survey across the five cities. You successfully highlight the trends for cafe visits and the comparison between instant and fresh coffee. However, the overview is slightly weak; while it attempts to summarize, it lacks a clear, high-level synthesis of the data. Some data points are described, but the comparison between cities could be more analytical rather than just listing percentages. To reach a higher band, ensure that the 'main features' are clearly contrasted in the introduction or overview to provide a more professional summary of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly repetitive. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother. For example, the transition between the cafe data and the coffee type data is a bit abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus will help improve the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the information, such as 'demand', 'survey', and 'habits'. However, there are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'preffer to bought' (should be 'preferred to buy') and 'differance' (spelling error). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the data. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that verb forms following 'to' are in the base form. Expanding your range to include more sophisticated descriptors for trends, such as 'fluctuated' or 'remained stable', would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'demand... are slightly high' (should be 'is') and 'people like to bought' (should be 'like to buy'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some issues with comma usage. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of these errors limits the score. Focusing on consistent tense usage—especially since you are describing past survey results—and correcting basic subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.
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