Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart illustrates the result of result of surveys about people who but coffee and tea purchase and drinking habits in five different cities of Australia over the period of four week.
Overall,Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart had more populated in went to cafe for coffee on the other hand Brisbane and Adelaide have low ratio who bought fresh coffee.
Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart have more than 60% people who went into coffee shop for drinking coffee while buying fresh coffee was lest common in those cities.Hobart 55% individuals use instant coffee which had more largest than other cities.
55% of Brisbane citizen had went to coffee restaurant while 53% people drink instant coffee. People of Adelaide had almost same ratio in instance coffee and who went into cafeteria. However people who bought fresh coffee is almost same in Brisbane and Adelaide almost 33%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified some main features, the reporting is inconsistent. For instance, you mention '60% of people' for Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart, but the data presentation is somewhat imprecise. The comparison between cities is attempted, but the lack of sufficient detail and the failure to reach the minimum length means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview and support all claims with accurate data points from the chart, while ensuring you meet the length requirement to fully develop your response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'while' and 'however'. There are issues with referencing; for example, the phrase 'which had more largest than other cities' is grammatically unclear and disrupts the logical progression of the comparison. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'conversely', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to guide the reader through your analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'people', 'bought', and 'coffee'. There are also several instances of awkward phrasing and word-choice errors, such as 'more populated in went to cafe' and 'instance coffee' (instead of 'instant coffee'). These errors occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'consumption', and 'preference', and ensure you check for basic spelling and collocation errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('Brisbane and Adelaide have low ratio'), tense usage ('had went'), and sentence structure ('Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart had more populated in went to cafe'). The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences with errors in complex constructions. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for these fundamental errors will significantly improve the readability and accuracy of your writing.
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