Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart compares the percentage of Australian cities who bought and drank three types of beverages in five different countries.
Overall, the highest proportion of customers who went to a cafe for coffee or tea in one month, whereas the proportion of them who bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks was the lowest.
In terms of going to a cafe , the proportion of people who were from Melbourne
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required 150-word minimum, reaching only 71 words. Consequently, the task is not fully addressed, and the information is not sufficiently developed. The summary of the main features is incomplete, and the comparison of data across the five cities is abandoned mid-sentence. Because the response is unfinished and fails to meet the length requirement, it cannot achieve a score higher than a 4.0 for Task Achievement. To improve, you must ensure you provide a full overview and support your points with data for all categories mentioned in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is too brief to demonstrate a logical progression of ideas or effective paragraphing. While there is an attempt at an 'Overall' statement, the lack of completion in the subsequent paragraph makes it impossible to assess the use of cohesive devices or paragraphing structure. The text ends abruptly, which disrupts the flow of information. To improve, focus on completing your sentences and using linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your observations about the different cities and categories.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, such as 'proportion' and 'bought'. There is an error in the introductory sentence where you refer to 'five different countries' instead of 'five Australian cities', which indicates a lack of attention to the prompt's details. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'expenditure', 'consumption habits', or 'preference'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains a limited range of grammatical structures. The sentence 'the highest proportion of customers who went to a cafe for coffee or tea in one month, whereas...' is grammatically incomplete, lacking a main verb for the subject. There are also issues with prepositional usage and article placement. Because the text is so short, it is difficult to judge your ability to use complex structures accurately. Focus on writing complete, grammatically sound sentences and proofreading for basic errors in subject-verb agreement.
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