Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart was shows the results of comparison between coffee and tea buying the drinking habits in five different cities of Australia in percentage.

The chart shows the results of buying the coffee and tea in different cities. So Melbourne cities sale most number of coffee and tea in last four week. And Brisbane and Adelaide lower number of sale a fresh coffee in last four weeks and Hobart is sale most number of instant coffee in last four weeks.

So, Sydney cities was sale a 43% 0f fresh coffee in last four weeks and at that time sale 47% of instant coffee and 62 % of coffee or tea both in last four weeks. and Melbourne was sale a 43% ,48% , 63% of fresh coffee , instant coffee and coffee or tea both in last four weeks. At that time Brisbane was sale a 34%,52%,56% 0f a fresh coffee , instant coffee and coffee or tea both in last four weeks.

S0 , Adelaide was sale a 34%,50%,49% ofa fresh coffee, instant coffee and tea

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight significant trends. The information is presented as a list of figures rather than a cohesive analysis. While the response covers the five cities, the data reporting is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that Melbourne had the highest sales in all categories, which is not clearly supported by the provided data. The lack of a clear summary of main features and the failure to make meaningful comparisons between the cities significantly limits the achievement of the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'in last four weeks' and 'was sale'. The transition between sentences is mechanical, and the lack of logical flow makes it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data. The referencing is also unclear, as the text jumps between cities without a consistent structure or logical grouping of the information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic verbs like 'sale' (incorrectly used as a verb) and 'shows'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. The word choice is often inaccurate, such as using 'sale' instead of 'sold' or 'sales'. The lack of variety in lexical items prevents the expression of precise meaning, which is necessary for an Academic Task 1 response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb tense and form, such as 'The bar chart was shows' and 'Melbourne cities sale'. Subject-verb agreement is frequently incorrect, and the sentence structures are simplistic and repetitive. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and punctuation is often misused. These persistent errors make the text difficult to read and demonstrate a very limited control over basic grammatical structures.

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