Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph shows the proportion of survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia.

Overall, two cities got a equally survey however three survey peoples faces decline . In the first survey Sydney faces less percentage of city residents as a compared to melbourne.it has 63%and as a compared between Brisbane and Adelaide Adelaide has has a only 50% however Brisbane have a 55%.hobart have 63 percentage.as a compared to give cities the highest percentage city residents got a Melbourne and lowest got a Adelaide.

However , Sydney, Melbourne Brisbane and Hobart faces growth percentage of city residents but only Adelaide faces slightly decreases in the end as well .coffee and tea buying and drinking percentage of city residents growth according to previous starting point every city increase their habitats sa well as.in fresh coffee bought sydney have higher rank and Brisbane have lower rank .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to clearly identify the main features or provide accurate comparisons. The description of the data is confusing, and the figures mentioned (e.g., '63%') are not clearly linked to the specific categories of 'bought fresh coffee' or 'visited a cafe'. The response lacks a clear overview, and the information provided is often contradictory or difficult to follow, making it hard for the reader to understand the trends in the five cities. To improve, you must clearly distinguish between the two categories (buying vs. drinking) and present the data in a logical, organized manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are not logically sequenced. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'as a compared to' and 'however'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of the argument. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'survey peoples faces decline' and 'growth percentage of city residents'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical trends, relying on basic words like 'growth' or 'faces'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'a significant proportion', or 'a downward trend', and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Brisbane have a 55%'), incorrect article usage, and fragmented sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misplaced commas and missing capital letters. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of complex sentences to add variety and accuracy to your writing.

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