Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage and habits of city residents who are buying and drinking coffee and tea in sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide and hobart in australia, in past four weeks.
Overall, within the five australian cities, in last four week, the percentage of people who consumes coffee or a tea within the cafe is significantly higher than percentage of instant coffee, while the fresh coffee which has been purchased is less than instant coffee.
Firstly, in sydeny, melbourne and hobart the percentage of residents who drink coffee or tea on-site is slightly above the 60 percent, while purchasing instant coffee comes in between, moderately above 45 percent and slightly near to 55 percent. Moreover the percentage of picking up a fresh coffee has shown the downward trend, it comes with range of 45 percent and 35 percent.
Lastly, the brisbane and adelaide represents, approximately same percentage in fresh coffee category, which is slightly below the 35 percent. The rate of instant coffee and went to a cafe, is significantly above 50 percent in brisbane, while in adelaidae it touches the number 50.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the general preference for cafe visits over other options. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you identify the trends, the description of the data is occasionally imprecise, such as using 'moderately above 45 percent' for a range that is quite broad. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the specific cities and categories mentioned in the chart. Some comparisons are made, but they could be more analytical by highlighting the most significant differences or similarities rather than just listing figures city by city.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use transition words like 'Overall', 'Firstly', and 'Lastly' to guide the reader. However, the cohesion within sentences is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as in the phrase 'the brisbane and adelaide represents, approximately same percentage'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of cohesive devices to link ideas more fluidly. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal logical progression needs more refinement to ensure a smoother reading experience.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'downward trend' and 'significantly higher'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'percentage of people who consumes' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'picking up a fresh coffee'. Additionally, there are consistent issues with capitalization, such as 'sydney', 'melbourne', and 'australian', which should always be capitalized. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that proper nouns are correctly formatted throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of information. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the brisbane and adelaide represents'), incorrect article usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'in last four week'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and sentence structure will significantly improve your score.
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