Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar chart illustrates the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities :
The first city associated with drinking habits is sydney about 44% of people bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks whereas exactly 45% of citizens bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks meanwhile 60% of indiviuals went to a cafe for coffee or tea.
The second category is melbourne, about 43% of people bought fresh coffee in last four weeks whereas about 48% of citizens bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks on the other hand, 63% of citizens went to a cafe for coffee .
The another third category is Brisbane, in brisbane 35% of citizens bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks whereas 52% of citizens bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks, on the other hand 55% of citizens went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks. The fourth category is adelaide, firstly about 35% of citizens bought frsh coffee in last four weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends or significant differences across the five cities. Instead, it lists data for each city in a repetitive, mechanical fashion. The response is incomplete, as it cuts off abruptly while describing the fourth city, failing to cover the final city or provide a concluding summary. By focusing on listing individual data points rather than identifying key features or making meaningful comparisons, the response does not fully address the requirements of the task. To improve, you should group data by category rather than city and ensure you include a clear overview of the most striking trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The organization is highly repetitive, with each paragraph following an identical, formulaic structure. The use of cohesive devices is limited and mechanical, relying heavily on simple connectors like 'whereas' and 'on the other hand'. There is a lack of logical progression between paragraphs, and the abrupt ending significantly disrupts the flow of the text. Paragraphing is present but used inconsistently, and the overall structure feels like a list of facts rather than a cohesive report. To improve, vary your sentence structures and use a wider range of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reuse of phrases such as 'bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks' and 'citizens'. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for describing data, such as verbs for trends (e.g., 'surpassed', 'fluctuated', 'remained steady'). Spelling errors, such as 'indiviuals' and 'frsh', further detract from the quality of the writing. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to data analysis and avoid repeating the same phrases throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures. There are frequent errors in punctuation, such as the misuse of colons and missing commas, as well as capitalization errors (e.g., 'sydney', 'australian', 'brisbane'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex sentence structures limits the grammatical range. The abrupt ending also leaves the final sentence incomplete, which is a significant grammatical failure. To improve, focus on using a variety of complex sentence structures and ensure consistent attention to basic punctuation and capitalization rules.
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