Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart elaborates the coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five major cities in Australia, including bought fresh coffee, bought instant coffee and went to cafe for coffee in last four weeks in different percentage.
Overall, the chart shows that all five cities has less in percentage to buying the fresh coffee in last four weeks as compare to the other varieties of the coffee use, and it also show that people of all cities bought instant coffee between 45 to 55 in percentage, but went to cafe or shop is highest in the percentage.
Eventually, in Sydney and Melbourne to buying fresh coffee in between 40 to 45 percent, and in Brisbane and Adelaide is between 30 to 35 percent, and in Hobart is almost 38 percent. On the other hand to bought instant coffee in normally consists half of the population. But the percentage of going abroad in cafe is in highest amount, because in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart has reached to more than 60 percent of the population.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the trends in fresh coffee, instant coffee, and cafe visits across the five cities. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies. For instance, the claim that 'going abroad in cafe' is the highest is confusingly phrased, and the data interpretation is occasionally imprecise. While you have selected key features, the comparison between cities could be more systematic. To improve, ensure that your data points are accurate and that you clearly distinguish between the three categories provided in the prompt, rather than grouping them in a way that obscures the specific findings for each city.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into three paragraphs, which is a standard structure. However, the flow of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the use of 'Eventually' to start the third paragraph is inappropriate for a summary task. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or incorrectly applied, such as 'On the other hand to bought instant coffee'. The progression of information is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the cities smoothly. More varied and precise linking words would improve the logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'less in percentage to buying' and 'went to cafe or shop is highest in the percentage'. The phrase 'going abroad in cafe' is particularly problematic as it does not accurately reflect the data provided. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'predominant', while ensuring that your word choices are contextually appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'all five cities has' and 'Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart has reached'. Additionally, sentence structures are often simplistic or incorrectly constructed, such as 'in Sydney and Melbourne to buying fresh coffee in between 40 to 45 percent'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of prepositions when describing data trends.
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