Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities:

In sydney, 44% of people bought fresh coffee in last four weeks whereas exactly 45% of citizens bought instant coffee in last four weeks on the other hand, 60% of citizens went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks. The next country is melbourne in this country 42% of citizens bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks whereas about 48% of citizens bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks whereas about 63% of citizens went to a cafe for a coffee. The next country is Brisbane about 35% of citizens bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks, whereas 53% of indiviuals bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks on the other hand exactly 55% went to a cafe for a coffee

The next country is adelaide,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide an overview of the main trends or significant differences, which is a requirement for Task 1. It merely lists data points for three cities, lacking a summary or comparison. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, as it cuts off mid-sentence after mentioning Adelaide, failing to cover the final city (Hobart) or provide a concluding synthesis. The information provided is repetitive and lacks the analytical depth required to reach a higher band. To improve, you must include an introductory overview of the main features and ensure all data points are covered in a structured, complete manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the text is essentially a list of statistics. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical, such as the constant use of 'whereas' and 'in last 4 weeks'. The abrupt ending of the text significantly disrupts the flow and coherence of the report. To improve, you should group information logically—perhaps by comparing the three categories across cities—and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases, such as 'bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks' and 'citizens bought instant coffee'. There is no attempt to use synonyms or more sophisticated vocabulary to describe trends or data. The term 'country' is used incorrectly to refer to cities like Sydney and Melbourne, which indicates a lack of precision. To improve, try to vary your vocabulary by using terms like 'purchased', 'consumed', 'a significant proportion', or 'the majority' to describe the data points.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors in punctuation and sentence structure. There is a lack of proper capitalization for proper nouns like 'Sydney', 'Melbourne', and 'Australian'. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary articles (e.g., 'in last four weeks' should be 'in the last four weeks'). The sentence structures are simple and repetitive, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensure proper capitalization of cities, and use articles correctly before time expressions.

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