Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart describe the percentages of residents in five Australian cities who bought fresh coffee,instant coffee and tea in the past four weeks.Overall customer visiting was the most popular in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart, while buying instant coffee was the most common in Adelaide. Buying fresh coffee was the lestt popular choice in all five cities melbourne had the highest number of residents who visited cafe at approximately 64% and hobart and sydney numbers at around 63% and 61%. Brisbane number a lower figure 56% while adelaide had the lowest percentage just under 50%.other hand instant coffee hobart had the highest percentage approximately 54% closely brisbane had 53% and adelaide 50%. Melbourne and sydney had lower figures around 48% and 46%.Finally fresh coffee purchases were record less common in sydney, the highest percentage 44% other side melbourne and hobart percentage approximately 43% and 39% brisbane and adelaide had the lowest figures of numbers around 34% and 35%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends across the five cities. You successfully highlighted the most popular activities and made relevant comparisons between the cities. However, the report lacks a clear structure, as it is presented as a single block of text rather than distinct paragraphs. While the key features are present, the lack of an overview paragraph and the grouping of data could be more analytical. To improve, ensure you clearly separate your introduction, overview, and body paragraphs to better highlight the data trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response suffers from a lack of paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a reliance on simple listing rather than using a variety of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas. For example, the transition between the discussion of cafe visits and instant coffee is abrupt, using only 'other hand' without proper punctuation or connecting phrases. To reach a higher band, you must use clear paragraph breaks and a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' 'Conversely') to guide the reader through your analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the necessary information about percentages and trends. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'lestt' instead of 'least' and 'record' instead of 'recorded'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'highest' and 'lowest'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for describing trends and data, and pay closer attention to spelling and word choice to ensure your writing appears more professional and precise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding sentence structure, punctuation, and subject-verb agreement. For instance, 'The bar chart describe' should be 'The bar chart describes', and many sentences are run-on or lack necessary punctuation, such as 'closely brisbane had 53%'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the current errors occasionally impede the flow of information. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using commas and periods correctly to separate distinct ideas.
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