Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph present the data about shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. the data is given of the 5 cities in Australia.
The five cities are Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart. there are 3 bar graph noted in which one design shows the coffee which is bought in last 4 weeks (a month) other with cross design bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks and last full grey went to cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.
First starting from Sydney there is 43% residence who bought the fresh coffee, 45% instant coffee and 62% gone at cafe. while in Melbourne 42% have fresh coffee, 45% people instant coffee and 63% gone for cafe. however in Hobert 37% individual prefer fresh coffee,54% instant and 63% at cafe.
in conclusion, we can see in every city there is more demand for coffee or tea in Australia. moreover people like more to drink coffee at cafe and sitting there by enjoying with people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the survey. However, the analysis is incomplete. You have provided data for Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart, but you have completely omitted the data for Brisbane and Adelaide, which are clearly visible in the chart. Furthermore, the summary lacks a clear overview of the trends; you have simply listed figures without comparing them effectively. To improve, ensure you cover all categories provided in the prompt and group information logically to highlight key similarities and differences across all five cities rather than listing them city by city.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the flow of ideas is somewhat mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally repetitive (e.g., 'first starting from', 'in conclusion'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as when you refer to '3 bar graph noted' without clearly defining the categories in a professional manner. The progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of a clear overview and the omission of two cities, which disrupts the logical flow of the report. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring a consistent structure will help improve your score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'bought', 'gone', and 'people'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as '62% gone at cafe' and '63% gone for cafe', which are not natural expressions. You should aim to use more precise terminology related to data reporting, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'consumed', or 'frequented'. Additionally, there are minor errors in spelling and word form, such as 'Hobert' instead of 'Hobart'. Expanding your range of vocabulary to include more academic and descriptive terms will significantly enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The bar graph present the data about shows', 'there are 3 bar graph noted', and '43% residence who bought'. These errors involve subject-verb agreement, pluralisation, and sentence construction. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several missing capital letters at the start of sentences. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that sentences are correctly punctuated.
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