Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar graph illustrates those australian people in five cities who bought and drank a coffee and tea.
Overall, it is evident that the Melbourne and Hobart
cities people love to went cafe however, Brisbane and Adelaide had lowest figure to bought a fresh coffee.
In Melbourne and Hobart, residence peoples like to go cafe rather than to bought a fresh coffee. The bought fresh coffee in Sydney and Melbourne had approximately amount. Instant coffee difference in Sydney and Melbourne is only 2%.
Moreover, the Brisbane and adelaide had same figured of buying fresh coffee.Hobart and Brisbane
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 97 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is incomplete and lacks the necessary detail to fully describe the data provided in the chart. Several cities mentioned in the prompt are not fully compared, and the conclusion is fragmented and unfinished. To improve, ensure you provide a comprehensive overview, select key features for all categories, and support your points with accurate data from the chart while meeting the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some attempt at organization, with an introduction and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and sometimes inaccurate way, such as the repetitive use of 'In Melbourne and Hobart'. The final sentence is incomplete, which disrupts the flow of information. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, complete topic sentence and logical development.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'bought', 'drank', and 'figure'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and form, such as 'residence peoples' instead of 'residents' and 'same figured' instead of 'same figure'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly unclear. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'consumption', 'preference', and 'statistically significant', while ensuring correct word forms are used throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. Examples include 'those australian people... who bought and drank a coffee' (incorrect article/pluralization), 'love to went cafe' (incorrect verb form), and 'had lowest figure to bought' (incorrect infinitive structure). The sentence structures are predominantly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are consistently faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, correct verb tenses, and the appropriate use of prepositions. Consistent practice with sentence construction will help reduce the frequency of these errors.
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