Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrates the results of the proportion of inhabitants from five distinct cities in Australia, purchasing and consuming habits of coffee and tea.
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that the percentage of people went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks was the most popular in all the cities except Adelaide. While in one month, the rate of residents bought instant coffee, and individuals purchased fresh coffee showed a considerable increase and gradual downward trend, respectively.
In detail, just lower 65% humankinds visited cafe for coffee or tea in previous month in Melbourne, and similarly Hobart, Brisbane and Sydney accounted for 63%, around 55% and 61%, respectively. While ratio of buys instant coffee increased significantly from Sydney (46%) to Brisbane (53%), and subsequently showed a slight drop to about 50% in Adelaide, before rising again
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified some main features, the analysis is incomplete. You have not fully covered all five cities or the three categories (cafe, fresh coffee, instant coffee) in a balanced way. The description of trends is somewhat confusing, particularly the reference to a 'downward trend' for fresh coffee, which is not clearly supported by the data provided. To improve, ensure you provide a comprehensive overview of all data points and ensure the response meets the length requirement to allow for full development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into an introduction and body paragraphs, which provides a basic structure. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is present (e.g., 'Overall', 'In detail', 'similarly'), but some transitions are used awkwardly, such as 'While in one month' and 'While ratio of buys'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the cities. To improve, focus on using linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus to enhance the logical flow of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and occasionally inaccurate. Phrases like 'just lower 65% humankinds' are unnatural and inappropriate for an academic report. You rely on basic descriptors and struggle with precise collocations related to data reporting. For instance, 'rate of residents bought' is grammatically incorrect and lacks the precision expected at higher bands. To improve, practice using more academic vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable', and avoid informal or non-standard terms like 'humankinds'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the percentage of people went to a cafe' (should be 'who went'), 'rate of residents bought' (should be 'rate of residents who bought'), and 'just lower 65%' (should be 'just under 65%'). The sentence structures are relatively simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of relative clauses, and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound before attempting more complex forms.
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