Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This is picture is a graph is a coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in australia.persantage of cities residents and mentions cities name( 1)sydney in bought fress coffe in last 4 weeks is 44%.bought instant coffe in Last 4 weeks is 45%.went to cafe for coffe or tea in last 4 weeks is 60%.(2)melbourne in bought fresh coffe in last 4 weeks is 43%.bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks is 48%.went to a caffe for coffe or tea in last 4 weeks is 64%.(3)brisbane in bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks 34%.bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks 53%.went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is 55%.(4)adelaide in bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is 34%.bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks is 50%went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is 49%.(5)hobart in bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is 37%.bought instant coffe in last 4 weeks is 59%.went to a cafe or tea in last 4 weeks is 64%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a summary or an overview of the main trends. Instead, it lists data points for each city in a repetitive, mechanical fashion. There is no attempt to compare the cities or highlight significant features, such as which city had the highest or lowest consumption. The task requires a synthesis of information, but the current approach is merely a transcription of the data. To improve, you must group information logically and identify key patterns rather than listing every single figure individually.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks paragraphing and logical progression. It is presented as a single block of text with numbered lists embedded, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a complete absence of cohesive devices (such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly') to link ideas or compare the data between cities. The structure is purely additive and repetitive, failing to guide the reader through the information in a meaningful way. You need to use clear paragraphs and transition words to organize your report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive. You use the same phrases ('bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks', 'went to a cafe') repeatedly throughout the text. There is no attempt to use synonyms or varied ways to describe the data. Furthermore, there are several spelling errors, such as 'persantage', 'fress', and 'caffe'. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and avoid repeating the same phrases for every data point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is highly problematic. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, such as 'This is picture is a graph is a...', and a lack of proper punctuation, with many sentences starting with lowercase letters. The use of articles is inconsistent, and the sentence construction is consistently simplistic and fragmented. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, proper capitalization, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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