Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart compare people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits among five Australian cities.
overall, It is noticed that per centage of people who went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is highest.
Sydney has almost same number, around 45 per cent of people who bought fresh coffee and instant coffee in last 4 weeks. Where the per cent of people who went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is 61. Melbourne has different numbers for all three categories. In Adelaide 50 per cent of residents bought instant coffee and almost same number of people went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks. Lowest number of people who bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is also in Adelaide along with the Brisbane with 34 per cent. Hobart has highest number of people prefer to went to cafe with 63 per cent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the chart. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, structured comparison across all five cities. While you mention specific percentages for Sydney, Melbourne, Adelaide, and Hobart, the data for Brisbane is only partially integrated. To achieve a higher band, you should group the data more logically—perhaps by category (fresh coffee, instant coffee, cafe visits) rather than city-by-city—to facilitate better comparisons. Additionally, ensure that all key trends, such as the overall dominance of cafe visits compared to the other two categories, are highlighted more clearly in the overview.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some transitions feel abrupt, such as the jump between Sydney and Melbourne. The overview is placed correctly, but the internal logic of the body paragraphs could be improved by using more varied linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Similarly', 'Furthermore'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the paragraphing is somewhat disjointed, which hinders the overall progression of the argument. Improving the use of cohesive devices will help the reader follow your comparisons more easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You rely heavily on repetitive phrasing, such as 'number of people' and 'in last 4 weeks'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'per centage' (spelling) and 'prefer to went to cafe' (grammatical error affecting lexical accuracy). To improve, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'significant', or 'marginal'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetition and demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The bar chart compare' (subject-verb agreement), 'almost same number' (missing article), and 'prefer to went to cafe' (incorrect verb form). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters in the middle of sentences (e.g., 'overall, It is noticed'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and article usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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