Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chat illustrates the result of a survey on the coffee and tea drinking habits of residents in five Australian cities over the previous four weeks overall; visiting cafes for coffee and tea was the most popular activity in all cities the least common .in addition instant coffee was higher proportion of people that fresh coffee in every city paragraps ;Around 61%of people in Sydney had visited a tea cafes four week compared with approximately 46% who purchased fresh coffee similar patterns were observed in Melbourne where nearly 64% of cafes about 49% and 43% instant and fresh coffee respectively paragrap; in Fafes visits accounted for 55% only slightly higher the figure of instant coffee purchases at 53% whereas just 35%brought fresh coffee and the lost figure of instant coffee purchases Adalade in Hobart 35% and 40% instant fresh coffee and tee respectively the higher and low in the five Australian cities
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to clearly report the main features or make effective comparisons. The data provided is often confusing or inaccurate, such as the claim that 'instant coffee was higher proportion of people that fresh coffee in every city,' which is not clearly supported by the provided figures. Furthermore, the description of the data for Hobart and Adelaide is disjointed and difficult to follow. The response lacks a clear overview of the trends, and the information is presented in a way that makes it hard for the reader to grasp the key differences between the five cities. To improve, you must ensure that the data points are accurate and that the main trends are highlighted clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The organization of the text is poor. The use of the word 'paragraps' and 'paragrap' as labels within the text is highly unconventional and disrupts the flow. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal or misused. For example, the transition 'in addition' does not effectively link the ideas. The text lacks clear paragraphing, and the overall structure is fragmented, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the five cities. You should focus on using standard paragraph structures and linking words like 'whereas,' 'in contrast,' or 'similarly' to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are several spelling errors, such as 'chat' instead of 'chart,' 'Fafes' (likely meant to be a city name), and 'Adalade' instead of 'Adelaide.' The word choice is often imprecise, such as 'brought fresh coffee' instead of 'bought.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more varied and accurate vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion,' 'percentage,' 'majority,' or 'minority,' and ensure that you spell city names and technical terms correctly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that impede communication. There are many run-on sentences and fragments, such as 'the least common .in addition instant coffee was higher proportion.' Punctuation is largely absent or incorrectly used, which makes the text difficult to parse. There are also errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'higher proportion of people that fresh coffee.' The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using correct punctuation to separate your ideas.
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