Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the results of a research about man’s buying and consuming habits for coffee and tea in given five cities in Australia.

Overall, the highest peak is for people who went to a cafe to buy or drink coffee or tea in last 4 weeks in given cities.However the lowest peak is for those who bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks in given cities .The percentages for people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks didn’t show much difference in following cities.

About 64% people in Melbourne and Hobart having coffee or tea by going to the cafes and these are the highest peaks.In Sydney the percentage is about 61% , in Brisbane and Adelaide cities have relatively low percentage compare to others.

People bought instant coffee in the following cities doesn’t have much difference in 4 weeks.Whereas the percentage of people who bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks are relatively lower than other categories.The lowest peak is about 34% people in Brisbane bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart, such as the high popularity of cafe visits and the lower figures for fresh coffee. However, the response lacks a clear overview that synthesizes the data effectively. While you mention the 'highest peak' and 'lowest peak', the description of the data is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision in comparing the five cities. To reach a higher band, ensure you group the data more logically rather than listing percentages city by city, and provide a more comprehensive summary of the trends across all categories.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'in the following cities', 'in last 4 weeks'). The transition between sentences is occasionally abrupt, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as when you refer to 'the following cities' without explicitly naming them in that specific context. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between your main points would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the basic meaning. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'man’s buying and consuming habits' (which should be 'people’s') and 'highest peak' (which is not the most natural way to describe a percentage in a bar chart). You rely on a limited range of vocabulary, repeating phrases like 'in last 4 weeks' multiple times. To improve, try to use more varied synonyms and precise terminology related to data reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with articles ('in the following cities') and subject-verb agreement ('People bought instant coffee... doesn’t have much difference'). Some sentences are fragmented or lack necessary prepositions, such as '64% people in Melbourne... having coffee', which should be '64% of people... had coffee'. While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they are often marred by these errors. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for missing articles and verb forms will help improve your accuracy.

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