Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart given information about the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities .
By having a cursory glance, it is vivid that , firstly , in Sydney , were bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks around 44% , which one of the biggest of city resident bought product. After that , bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks around 46% . After words , in last 4 weeks bought coffee were around 62%. Furthermore , In Melbourne , bought fresh coffee and instant coffee in last 4 weeks were around 44% and 47% . However , went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks about biggest percentages around 64% . Moreover , In Brisbane , individuals bought fresh and instant coffee in last 4 weeks were similar around 34% and 53% . While , went to a cafe for tea and coffee in last 4 weeks around 56% .
Moving further ahead , it is lucid that , the masses , in Adelaide , bought fresh coffee in last for 4 weeks 33% and bought instant coffee in the last 4 weeks around 50% . Consequently ,went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks were around 49% . Along with this , in Hobart country , most individuals consume fresh and instant coffee in the last 4 weeks were around only47% and 54% . Whereas , went a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks around 64% .
By giving general overview , in Hobart , went a cafe for tee and coffee biggest percentages in the resident , while , in Brisbane , bought fresh coffee which one of the lowest consumer.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the survey across the five cities. However, the reporting is often mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical focus. While you have included data for all cities, the comparisons are sometimes confusing due to grammatical errors, making it difficult to follow the trends. The overview provided at the end is somewhat disjointed and does not effectively synthesize the key differences between the cities. To improve, focus on grouping the data more logically (e.g., comparing coffee habits versus cafe visits) rather than listing city by city, and ensure the overview highlights the most significant trends clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Consequently', but they are often used mechanically or incorrectly, which disrupts the flow. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'which one of the biggest of city resident', which makes it hard to identify the subject. Improving the use of transition words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic phrases like 'bought fresh coffee' and 'in last 4 weeks'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'Hobart country' (Hobart is a city) and 'vivid that' (instead of 'evident'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'buying' (e.g., 'purchasing', 'consuming') and use more sophisticated structures to describe data trends, such as 'a significant proportion' or 'the figures for...'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and fragmented sentences. For example, 'The bar chart given information' should be 'The bar chart gives information', and 'went to a cafe' lacks a clear subject. The sentence structures are largely simple or repetitive, and the lack of control over basic grammar often impedes communication. You need to focus on subject-verb agreement, proper article usage, and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a complete verb phrase to improve accuracy.
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