Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart demonstrates the final form survey about the five Australian cities peoples who bought fresh coffee and tea purchased instant coffee and visited a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.
Overall, visiting the cafe was the most popular actual in most cities, while buying the coffee was the least common. Adelaide was the only city where the visiting of cafe was not the leading competition.
In Sydney, 44% of residents who bought fresh coffee, compared with 46% who bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks. However, the 61% of people visited the cafe. Moreover, Melbourne recorded about 42% for fresh coffee and 48% for instant coffee. Although cafe visit ere highest roughly 63%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have attempted to summarize the main features of the chart, the analysis is incomplete. You have only provided data for two of the five cities (Sydney and Melbourne), failing to report on Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart. Furthermore, the description of the data is somewhat mechanical and lacks the necessary depth to fully compare the trends across all categories. To improve, ensure you cover all data points provided in the prompt and provide a more comprehensive overview of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph, which provides a basic structure. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the data analysis. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall' and 'However', but they are sometimes used awkwardly, such as 'Moreover, Melbourne recorded... Although cafe visit ere highest'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of a concluding summary or a more balanced structure makes the flow feel disjointed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each city is addressed logically would enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'bought fresh coffee' and 'bought instant coffee'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'final form survey' and 'leading competition' (which is not the correct term for a chart comparison). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied synonyms for 'buying' and 'visiting', and ensure that your terminology accurately reflects the data presented in the chart.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'peoples who bought' (should be 'people who bought'), 'visiting of cafe' (should be 'visiting a cafe'), and 'cafe visit ere highest' (likely a typo for 'were'). The sentence structure is often fragmented, and there are issues with article usage and verb agreement. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately without missing auxiliary verbs.
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