Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The supplied vertical bar chart compares the outcome of a survey about individuals buying and drinking habit of cafferine and tea in five Australian cities.
Overall, it is quite evident from the graph that very few people bought fresh coffee, while moderate individual consumed instant coffee
To commence with, Melbourne is the top one city where people went to a cafe with almost 64% and second Hobart with 63%, but at top notch with ratio of 54% as people bought instant coffee. The lowest was the Adelaide with just 49% of all. individual from Sydney bought maximum fresh coffee around 44% with least intant coffee ot of all cities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the task by comparing survey results across five Australian cities regarding coffee and tea habits. However, the response is incomplete and suffers from a severe under-length penalty, containing only 109 words against the 150-word minimum requirement. Furthermore, the selection of main features is disjointed, and comparisons are difficult to follow due to fragmented reporting. Important data points are mentioned selectively without a clear overview, and the description of specific cities (e.g., Melbourne, Hobart, Adelaide, Sydney) lacks accuracy and thorough development. Because the response is significantly under the minimum length requirement and fails to adequately cover all parts of the visual data, it aligns with the descriptors for Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is divided into brief paragraphs, but the overall organisation lacks a clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or confusing, such as 'To commence with' leading into a jumbled set of statistics. The transition between sentences is abrupt, and referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'top one city', 'at top notch with ratio'). There is no clear structure guiding the reader smoothly through the comparison of the five cities. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion of the body section is faulty. These characteristics reflect the standard of Band 4.0, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently enough to ensure smooth reading.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and contains several noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'cafferine' instead of caffeine, 'intant' instead of instant, and awkward phrasing like 'top one city' and 'at top notch with ratio'. The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive, repeatedly relying on simple terms like 'people', 'bought', and 'cities'. While the intended meaning can occasionally be discerned, the lexical inaccuracies and spelling mistakes cause strain for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band. This performance corresponds closely to Band 4.0, where basic vocabulary and frequent errors limit the precision of the communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues, missing articles, and incorrect prepositions (e.g., 'individual from Sydney bought maximum fresh coffee around 44% with least intant coffee ot of all cities'). Sentence boundaries and word forms are frequently mishandled, which occasionally distorts the meaning and causes difficulty for the reader. Given the high frequency of structural errors and the lack of complex sentence control, the writing fits the Band 4.0 descriptors for Grammatical Range and Accuracy.
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