Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This picture illustrates the results of the survay about the peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in the five Australian cities.

Bought the fresh coffee in the sydney at the 44% but in the melbourne its decrease one percentage however in the brisbane bought of coffee is more decreas and after that bought of the coffee slightly increase with the passage of the time. But as we can see that if people bought the instance coffee in the next five weeks it will increase with the passage of the time in the brisbane and mostly high in the hobart. But if we can see the amount of the tea is more higher then the other and the amounts of the tea move higher then others and decrease in the Brisbane and Adelaide then move to forward at the higher point in Hobart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response falls short of the minimum length requirement, containing only 144 words instead of the required 150 words, which negatively impacts Task Achievement. Furthermore, the task is only partially addressed. While the student attempts to describe trends in coffee and tea habits across Australian cities, the details are confused, inaccurate, and fail to provide a clear summary of the main features or comparisons. Phrases like 'bought of coffee is more decreas and after that bought of the coffee slightly increase' demonstrate an inability to accurately interpret and report the survey data. Ideas are heavily underdeveloped and difficult to follow, leading to a band score of 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks clear overall progression and logical organization. The entire response consists of just two massive, run-on sentences with no proper paragraphing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, as seen in the repetitive and awkward use of 'and after that', 'But as we can see that', and 'But if we can see'. Referencing is unclear throughout, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information or understand which city and category are being linked. This structural weakness corresponds to a band score of 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and plagued by severe word-choice and collocation errors. Examples include 'survay' (survey), 'peoples' (people's), 'bought the fresh coffee' (purchased fresh coffee), 'instance coffee' (instant coffee), and 'more higher' (higher). The student repeatedly misuses the verb 'bought' as a noun. These frequent lexical inadequacies strain the reader and severely limit the precision required for Academic Task 1 data reporting, placing the writing firmly in the band 4.0 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying on clumsy, over-extended compound sentences connected by coordinating conjunctions like 'and' and 'but'. There is a complete lack of accurate complex structures. Grammar and punctuation errors are constant, including missing apostrophes, incorrect verb forms ('its decrease', 'is more decreas'), and awkward phrasing ('move to forward at the higher point'). These frequent errors distort meaning and make large portions of the text ungrammatical, justifying a band score of 4.0.

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