Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This pie chart illustrate the information about coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia. Straight way show the five city who are intereseted in buy and drink coffee or tea. At the north south line show the percentage of city residents.People have a lot of interest about coffee or tea. They always prefer to take tea or coffee in different flavour. Coffee is use for develop a new taste and enhance our concentration level. Sydney a city of Autralia where people bought 40 percent fresh coffee last 4 week and instant coffee bought 45 percent yet, they prefer 60 percent to take coffee and tea from a cafe bacause they make brilliant taste coffee.Second one city of Australia is melbourne where people bought 40 percent fresh and 45 percent instant coffee in last four week. They prefer 64 percent coffee or tea from cafe. Brisbane and adelaide are same interest to buy fresh coffee.Brisbane 55 percent have interest to visit cafe and take tea or coffee. Hobart people 37 percent prefer to take fresh coffee and 54 percent buy instant coffee. although 63 percent people of hobart want to go to cafe and have fresh coffee or tea from cafe with great taste. In conclusion three city competition with coffee. lowest interest to coffee is adeaide about coffee. Concluded, coffee play a crucial role in every country, but Australia prefer coffee mostly des to taste or concentration for work.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting data from the chart, but there are several issues. First, the response refers to the stimulus incorrectly as a 'pie chart' instead of a bar chart. Second, while some data points are mentioned (such as Sydney's 40% fresh coffee or Melbourne's figures), many of the statistics cited are inaccurate or imprecise when compared against the visual data. For instance, Brisbane's café visits are stated as 55% (actual: 55.5%), but other figures show noticeable divergence. Furthermore, the response includes a significant amount of irrelevant personal commentary and speculation ('Coffee is use for develop a new taste...'), which detracts from an objective summary. Overall, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks clear logical organisation and progression. The text is presented in one dense paragraph with almost no traditional essay structure or effective paragraphing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with awkward transitions such as 'Straight way show' and 'Second one city'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to follow which city or statistic the writer is referring to. While there is a concluding sentence, it feels tacked on and does not adequately summarize the main features of the visual data. These cohesive and structural shortcomings place the response at Band 4.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors that occasionally impede understanding. Examples include 'intereseted in buy', 'take tea or coffee', and 'adeaide' instead of Adelaide. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary ('concentration level', 'crucial role'), but these are overshadowed by basic errors in word formation and collocation ('Coffee is use for develop', 'lowest interest to coffee'). Spelling errors are also present. The vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic topic, aligning with a Band 5.0 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or compound sentences are consistently faulty or incomplete (e.g., 'Sydney a city of Autralia where people bought... yet, they prefer 60 percent to take...'). There are frequent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'three city competition' and 'coffee play a crucial role'. Punctuation is also erratic, which frequently causes difficulty for the reader. These persistent errors across most sentences support a Band 4.0.
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