Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart illustrates,the information of a survey about coffee and tea buying drinking habits in five Australian cities. Overall,it is clear that the percentage of went to a cafe was much higher then, the city of Brisbane bought fresh coffee which was lower.
In the begenning, the city of Sydney bought fresh coffee the ratio near 44% ,then bought instant coffee percentage of 45% and went to cafe for coffee or tea was ratio above 60%.Second city Melboume ratio was bought fresh coffee approximately 42% bought instant coffee ratio was 48% and went to a cafe was a higher ratio 64%. Third city Brisbance bought fresh coffee percentage was lower 33% bought instant coffee ratio was 53% and went to a cafe or tea ratio was 55%.City of Adelaida bought some coffee ratio was 34% bought instant coffee percentage 50% and went to cafe ratio was around 49%.Last city name Hobart ratio was bought fresh coffee near 38% Then bought instant coffee ratio was 54% and went to a cafe foe coffee and tea ratio was 62%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart across all five cities, noting the breakdown of buying fresh coffee, buying instant coffee, and visiting a café. However, the overview is extremely weak, ungrammatical, and fails to clearly highlight the broader trends (such as instant coffee being more popular for buying in most cities, whereas café visits were universally high). Furthermore, data reporting is heavily repetitive in structure, relying on a mechanical listing of percentages for each city without adequate comparison. While the figures reported are generally accurate according to the visual data, the lack of a well-developed overview and comparative analysis limits the response to Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is severely hindered by poor paragraphing, punctuation errors, and a lack of cohesive devices. The response is essentially split into a short, flawed introductory/overview sentence and one massive, unbroken block of text for the body. Within this body paragraph, sentences are strung together awkwardly with commas or run-on structures (e.g., 'Second city Melboume ratio was...'). Referencing is repetitive and mechanical, using phrases like 'ratio was' repeatedly. While there is a basic chronological or geographical progression moving from Sydney to Hobart, the lack of proper paragraph structuring and cohesive linking results in a Band 4 level of coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is very limited and repetitive. The student repeatedly relies on basic words and phrases such as 'ratio', 'percentage', 'bought', and 'went to a cafe'. There are also several spelling errors and typos throughout the text, including 'begennning', 'Melboume', 'Brisbance', 'Adelaida', and 'foe'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with very low accuracy, and word choice is frequently unnatural. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic topic of coffee and tea habits, the frequency of errors and lexical repetition places this firmly at Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, repetitive clauses strung together incorrectly. There are frequent missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and severe punctuation errors, such as comma splices ('Overall,it is clear...', 'Sydney bought fresh coffee the ratio near 44% ,then bought instant...'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when clause combinations are tried, they result in ungrammatical fragments. Grammatical inaccuracies are pervasive throughout the text and frequently impede smooth reading. Therefore, a Band 4 score is appropriate.
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