Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given bar graph illustrates the outcome of a survey about individual's coffee and tea buying as well as drinking habits in Sydeny, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart, whereas the data has been calibrated in percentage.
By visualising the given information, it is clearly seen that people bought fresh and instant coffee in last 4 weeks are higest in Hobart about 63 and 54 percent respectively. Moreover, Melbourne also had the same purchase of fresh coffee as 63 percent nearly. Apart from this ,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 84 words against the required minimum of 150 words. Because of this, it fails to present a fully developed overview and omits most of the key features and comparisons required by the prompt (such as the data for Brisbane, Adelaide, and the contrasts between instant and fresh coffee). Furthermore, there are significant factual inaccuracies in the data reporting; for example, the student claims that people buying fresh and instant coffee were highest in Hobart at 'about 63 and 54 percent respectively', whereas the visual data shows that café visits were highest in Melbourne and Hobart at around 63%, and instant coffee purchases peaked in Brisbane and Hobart at 53-54.5%. Due to the incomplete nature of the response and data misinterpretation, it falls into Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay breaks off mid-sentence ('Apart from this ,'), meaning there is no proper conclusion or full paragraph development. While the opening sentence attempts an introductory overview, the lack of completion and overall brevity prevent any meaningful logical progression or effective paragraphing. Cohesive devices are minimal, with 'whereas' and 'Moreover' used awkwardly. Referencing is occasionally confused due to misread data. Because the text is truncated and lacks a coherent structure across multiple developed paragraphs, it aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors for cohesion and organisation.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The student attempts some task-specific vocabulary such as 'calibrated in percentage', 'buying and drinking habits', and 'respectively'. However, there are notable spelling errors ('Sydeny', 'higest') and awkward phrasings like 'people bought fresh and instant coffee in last 4 weeks'. The range of vocabulary is extremely limited due to the short length of the text, restricting the student's ability to demonstrate flexibility or precision. While basic communication is attempted, the lexical limitations and errors place this response at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student attempts a complex sentence structure in the introduction ('The given bar graph illustrates... whereas the data has been calibrated...'), but it contains a minor misuse of 'whereas'. The second sentence contains a significant grammatical error in the relative clause: 'people bought fresh and instant coffee in last 4 weeks are higest', missing a relative pronoun or participle ('who bought') and producing a subject-verb agreement error. Because the text is only a few sentences long, the grammatical range is severely restricted, resulting in a Band 4.0 score.
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