Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This bar chart illustrates survey of the australian people's havit of having ter and coffee. The Australia's five states were mension here. This data gives information about last 4 weeks.Five states were sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart. All states were fixed ratio for visiting.

Each and every state follow same ration for bought tea and coffee. In sydney 43% , Melbourne 42%, Brisbane 33%, Adelaide 34%, Hobart 39 % for fresh coffee. For instate coffee people visited most in Hobart with 54% and Sydney was 45% which was less in all states.

All states were visited offically with their people. Melbourne was the most went place for tea and coffee with 63% and Adelaide was less visited with 49%.

Some states were visited most and some were less. Perticuler state had there own famous method to visit but a common thing in all state was they like more instant coffee.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, mentioning categories such as fresh coffee, instant coffee, and café visits across the five cities. However, the data reporting is frequently inaccurate and confused. For example, the student states that 'For instate coffee people visited most in Hobart with 54% and Sydney was 45%', mixing up café visits and instant coffee purchases. Furthermore, the cities mentioned are incorrectly referred to as 'states', and the figures contain multiple inaccuracies when compared to the visual data. The overview is weak, and the response lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the main trends. This performance aligns with Band 4.5 to 5.0 descriptors, specifically fulfilling the partial task fulfillment of Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is organized into four short paragraphs, attempting to structure the overview and body details. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing statements and poor referencing. Phrases like 'All states were fixed ratio for visiting' and 'All states were visited offically with their people' are incoherent and fail to guide the reader smoothly through the data. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a disjointed reading experience. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical links between sentences are weak. This reflects the characteristics of Band 4.0 to 4.5, settling at Band 4.0 due to the frequent breakdowns in coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'havit' for habit, 'ter' for tea, 'mension' for mention, 'instate' for instant, 'Perticuler' for particular). The student struggles with basic collocations and terminology relevant to an Academic Task 1 response, incorrectly using words like 'states' instead of 'cities' and 'visited' instead of 'purchased' or 'went to a café'. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a precise academic summary, which places this performance firmly in the Band 4.0 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures that are frequently flawed. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and preposition usage (e.g., 'In sydney 43% , Melbourne 42%', 'All states were visited offically with their people', 'they like more instant coffee'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when simple sentences are constructed, grammatical errors frequently cause strain for the reader. Punctuation and capitalization are also poorly handled. These issues are characteristic of a Band 4.0 response.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.