Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph illustrate the outcomes of a survey about peoples coffee and tea purchasing and drinking habits in five Austrialian cities.

Overall, ths outcomes of a survey about peoples purchasing and drinking habits in five Austrialian cities over the period, slightily decreased before reaching the peak in the final year. Cafe for Coffee consistently had the highest percentage, followed by instant coffee, while fresh coffee had the lower consumption throughout the period.

According to the graph, Sydney bought 43% fresh coffee which increased to nearly 45% instant coffee in last 4 week, while reacking the peak of 62% cafe for coffe or tea. Moreover, bought 48% instant coffee in Melbourne which minimally decreased almost 41%, cafe for coffee went to cafe about 62% foced to be gradual increased in last 4 week. However, fresh coffee in Brisbane was 34% which slightly increased around 54%,while minimally increased 56%. Moreover, the instant cofee in Adelaide and Hobart foced to be increased strightly but fresh cofee was decline before the instant cofee in both country, while reaching the top of the peak coffee for tea is increased faster then the Adelaide with the 62%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting data from the bar graph, but the response suffers from significant weaknesses in data interpretation and feature selection. The overview section contains confusing and inaccurate statements, such as claiming that the habits 'slightily decreased before reaching the peak in the final year'—which does not accurately reflect a static survey chart without a timeline. Furthermore, the body paragraphs struggle to accurately report the data points, containing vague phrasing and misread percentages, such as 'Sydney bought 43% fresh coffee'. While the response does mention categories like fresh coffee, instant coffee, and cafés, the delivery lacks clarity and fails to make clear, relevant comparisons across the five cities, pulling the task achievement score down into the lower bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, including a clear introduction and an overall summary. However, the logical progression within the body paragraphs is severely disrupted by confusing sentence structures, mechanical transitions, and referencing errors. Phrases like 'According to the graph, Sydney bought 43% fresh coffee which increased to nearly 45% instant coffee' incorrectly link static data points as if they were a chronological progression. Cohesive devices are used repetitively ('Moreover', 'However'), and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparisons between cities and coffee habits.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples of spelling errors include 'Austrialian', 'slightily', 'ths', 'reacking', 'coffe', 'foced', 'strightly', and 'decline'. The student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'purchasing', 'consumption', and 'percentage', but lacks the precision required for higher bands. Collocations are sometimes awkward or unnatural, such as 'cafe for coffee went to cafe about 62% foced to be gradual increased'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is limited, consisting largely of simple and flawed complex sentences. There are frequent and systematic errors in tense usage, verb forms, and clause structures. For instance, the writer incorrectly treats static survey data as ongoing or past actions with words like 'bought', 'increased', and 'was decline'. Sentences often lack essential grammatical elements or are poorly joined, such as 'Moreover, bought 48% instant coffee in Melbourne which minimally decreased almost 41%'. Punctuation and word order errors are widespread, causing constant strain for the reader.

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