Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart gives information about the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
This chart talks about coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in cities of Australia like Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.as well as it shows the percentage of last four weeks. I also gives information about fresh coffee, instant coffee and went to cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks.
The report shows the comparison like the highest percentage are two cities named Hobart and Melbourne around above 60% and less then 65% those who went to cafe for coffee or tea.The report shows about instant coffee highest percentage in Hobart city. moreover, on tope in Sydney people use fresh coffee near 45%.
In addition to it the report do comparison among lowest amount of fresh coffee use in Brisbane, and instant coffee in Sydney and people went to cafe for coffee or tea in Adelaide.
In conclusion, the report do of last four weeks it is the comparison among people of five cities of Australia those who use fresh coffee, instant coffee and people who went to cafe for coffee and tea for last four weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The candidate attempts to address the prompt by mentioning the five Australian cities and the categories of fresh coffee, instant coffee, and café visits. However, the response fails to provide a cohesive or accurate summary of the main features and comparisons. Much of the text consists of vague assertions rather than specific data points from the chart. For instance, stating 'the highest percentage are two cities named Hobart and Melbourne around above 60% and less then 65%' lacks precise reporting of the figures (Melbourne is 63.5% and Hobart is 63%). Furthermore, key trends are missed or incorrectly described, and the response lacks a well-developed overview, relying instead on repetitive meta-language ('The report shows...'). This performance falls short of Band 6 requirements due to the lack of clear, fully supported comparisons and data selection.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is organized into multiple paragraphs, but the overall logical progression is weak. Sentences often lack connection, and cohesive devices are either misused or overly repetitive, such as the constant formulaic introduction of ideas ('The report shows...', 'In addition to it the report do...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack a clear thematic focus. For example, the second paragraph is a collection of fragmented thoughts about the chart's contents rather than a coherent introduction and overview. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the mechanical transitions impede smooth reading. This reflects Band 4 standard characteristics where information and ideas are not arranged in a sufficiently coherent manner.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on copying words directly from the prompt ('coffee and tea buying and drinking habits', 'five Australian cities', 'fresh coffee', 'instant coffee'). There are numerous lexical errors and unnatural word choices, such as 'went to cafe for coffee or tea' used as a noun phrase, 'on tope in Sydney', and 'the report do of last four weeks'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are absent, and basic word-formation errors are frequent. The limited and repetitive range of vocabulary causes strain for the reader throughout the text, placing this response firmly in Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed complex structures. There are persistent, major errors in sentence construction, verb forms, and prepositions. Examples include 'around above 60% and less then 65% those who went to cafe', 'the report do comparison among lowest amount', and 'people of five cities of Australia those who use...'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces and comma splices. Because errors are frequent, distort meaning in places, and prevent the appearance of error-free sentences, the grammar aligns with Band 4 descriptors.
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