Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrate the result of survey about coffee and tea of people buying and drinking habits in five cities of Australia.

In the chart,the lower amount to bought fresh coffee frome people in this five cities and the ratio of people went to cafe is high.

Starting from sydney the ratio of people went to cafe is normally high from 60 percent, the ratio of bought instant coffee is 45% and bought fresh coffee is below 45%.In Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart

the ratio of bought frsh coffee is lower and bought istant coffee is below 55% in every city.In Sydney, Melbourne, brisbane and Hobart people went to cafe ratio is higher and below 65% then in Adelaide bought instant coffee is higher than bought fresh coffee and went cafe for coffee and tea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarize the survey data regarding coffee and tea habits across five Australian cities. However, the word count falls short of the required 150-word minimum, containing only 136 words, which results in a penalty under Task Achievement. While the writer touches on the main categories such as fresh coffee, instant coffee, and café visits, the information is presented in a somewhat confused and disorganized manner. Data points are mentioned, but comparisons are weak and lack sufficient detail. Furthermore, some data references are inaccurate or difficult to follow due to poor expression, such as claiming the ratio of people buying fresh coffee is the 'lower amount' and failing to accurately capture the specific trends for each city.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear and logical overall structure. The response is essentially a single block of text with no proper paragraphing to separate the introduction, body details, or overview. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a choppy and disjointed reading experience. Phrases like 'Starting from sydney' and 'In the chart,the lower amount to bought fresh coffee' fail to create smooth transitions between ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which city or category is being discussed.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical range is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words like 'ratio', 'people', 'coffee', and 'bought'. There are numerous word formation and collocation errors, such as 'amount to bought fresh coffee', 'frome people', 'frsh coffee', and 'istant coffee'. Spelling mistakes are frequent. Vocabulary is inadequate to discuss statistical data precisely, with terms like 'ratio' used incorrectly in place of percentages or proportions. Communication is strained due to these lexical inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are heavily flawed and ungrammatical, such as 'In Sydney, Melbourne, brisbane and Hobart people went to cafe ratio is higher and below 65% then in Adelaide bought instant coffee is higher than bought fresh coffee and went cafe for coffee and tea.' Punctuation is faulty, with missing spaces after commas and lack of capitalization for proper nouns like 'sydney' and 'brisbane'. Errors are frequent and consistently impede understanding.

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