Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given chart provide the data about five Australian cities. In which describes the public habits in buying and drinking coffee from the different cities shops during four weeks.
To begin with, it is clearly evident that there are three types of individuals who likes to buy several types of coffee. Someone love to use fresh coffee while others like to drink instant coffee whereas some persons are used to drink both tea and coffee.
On the other hand, there are five cities Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart. If we look at those who likes to drink fresh coffee the percentage of those are almost similar in all cities as if we talking about the instant coffee users the percentage of those are very low in Sydney however in remaining cities the percentage of those are almost equal. Hence, the percentage of people who used both coffee and tea are diminish in Brisbane overweighs the Sydney in Sydney the percentage of those are increase to 43% instead of this in Hobart the percentage is 38%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by describing data related to coffee and tea in Australian cities, but the task response is weak. The introduction is inaccurate ('The given chart provide' instead of provides), and the summary of categories is confused, referring to 'three types of individuals' rather than three distinct consumer behaviors. Furthermore, the selection of features is poor; the student states that the percentage of fresh coffee users is 'almost similar in all cities,' which misreads the data range (from 34.5% to 44%), and claims instant coffee percentages are very low in Sydney while equal elsewhere, which contradicts the provided figures. The conclusion/comparison section is muddled with inaccurate data points ('43% instead of this in Hobart the percentage is 38%'). Consequently, this performance falls under Band 4.0 as it touches on the task minimally and contains significant inaccuracies in reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
Coherence and cohesion are severely compromised in this response. The essay is divided into three very short paragraphs, but the logical progression within and between them is frequently disrupted. The opening paragraph contains incomplete relative clauses ('In which describes the public habits...'). Transitional phrases like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand' are used mechanically and often inappropriately, given that the subsequent sentences do not logically contrast with the preceding ones. Pronoun referencing is weak and confusing (e.g., repeating 'the percentage of those' multiple times without clear antecedents). There is a lack of overall progression, leading to a confusing jumble of thoughts in the final paragraph. This aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Throughout the text, the student relies heavily on simple words and phrases such as 'chart,' 'provide,' 'data,' 'cities,' and 'coffee.' There is frequent lexical repetition, especially the phrase 'the percentage of those.' Attempts at less common vocabulary result in awkward or incorrect collocations, such as 'public habits' instead of consumer habits, or 'individuals who likes to buy' instead of consumers who prefer. Word formation errors are also present, such as 'diminish' used as an adjective or participle. Because the lexical range is limited and contains frequent noticeable errors that strain the reader, the performance sits comfortably at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay, demonstrating a very limited range of structures. There are persistent basic errors in subject-verb agreement ('The given chart provide', 'individuals who likes', 'percentage... are diminish'), tense misuse ('is increase'), and sentence boundaries (run-on sentences such as 'On the other hand, there are five cities Sydney, Melbourne...'). Complex sentence attempts are heavily flawed and frequently ungrammatical or incomprehensible (e.g., 'Hence, the percentage of people who used both coffee and tea are diminish in Brisbane overweighs the Sydney in Sydney the percentage of those are increase...'). Because errors are frequent, pervasive, and often distort meaning, a Band 4.0 score is appropriate here.
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