Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart illustrates the results of a survey about people's drinking and buying habits of coffee and tea in five distant cities of Australia.
Overall, maximum people is interested to go to a cafe for coffee or tea, while very poor people is interested to buy fresh coffee.
On the one hand, individuals go for coffee or sometimes tea, range is from approximately 49% to 63% in 5 distant cities. Moreover,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response is severely under length, containing only 72 words against the required minimum of 150 words. Consequently, it only partially addresses the task. While the introduction provides a basic paraphrase of the prompt and the overview attempts to highlight main features ("maximum people is interested to go to a cafe"), the body paragraph is incomplete and breaks off mid-sentence after mentioning only one data range. The content is insufficient to meet the full requirements of an Academic Task 1 response, resulting in a low band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text begins with a clear introduction and an overall summary statement connected by cohesive markers such as "Overall". However, due to the extreme brevity of the text, organizational structure is underdeveloped. Only a single fragment of a body paragraph exists, ending abruptly with a dangling conjunction ("Moreover,"). Paragraphing is minimal, and cohesive devices cannot be fully evaluated because the text lacks sufficient progression and development.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts some task-specific vocabulary such as "illustrates", "survey", and "habits". However, word choices are often awkward or unnatural, such as "drinking and buying habits of coffee and tea in five distant cities" (instead of distinct or major cities). There are also significant collocation issues, such as "maximum people is interested" instead of the majority of people. The vocabulary is basic and restricted, which limits the precision of the descriptions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text contains noticeable grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For instance, "maximum people is interested to go" contains a subject-verb agreement error ('people is' instead of 'people are') and incorrect prepositional usage ('interested to go' instead of 'interested in going'). Another error is found in "very poor people is interested", which misuses 'poor' for 'few'. Sentence structures are extremely simple, and the unfinished sentence at the end further demonstrates a lack of control.
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