Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar graph illustrates that overall the highest reside persons in austraila went to cafe in last four weeks and minium community bought fresh coffee however in between 45% to 55% residents bought and drink instant coffee in according to the analysis of last month.

Futhermore if we see the bar graph more deeply than we get to know about the proper percentages of each category residents so, in sydney fresh coffee buyers are minimum and instant coffee buyers are close to them but highest residents went to cafe same for melbourne but if we see bribane and adelaide they both are almost same in percentages than we step up to Hobart residians of Hobart bought 40% fresh coffee and 55% instant but higher number is also same like in all five cities most of the people went to cafe for coffee and stuff.

In crux there were huge number of people who went for coffee and tea rather than buying fresh coffee in last four weeks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover all parts of the task by reporting the general trends and some specific figures across the five cities. However, the data presentation is marred by severe inaccuracies and vague descriptions, such as stating that 'sydney fresh coffee buyers are minimum' when Adelaide is actually lower, or that Brisbane and Adelaide are 'almost same in percentages' across all categories despite distinct variations. The overview mentions that the highest percentage of residents went to a cafe and the lowest bought fresh coffee, which captures the main features, but the lack of precise data handling and numerous misreadings of the chart prevent the response from achieving a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The essay is divided into three brief paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the logical progression is weak due to run-on sentences and a lack of proper punctuation. Cohesive devices are used very poorly, relying on conversational and repetitive connectors like 'Futhermore if we see the bar graph more deeply than we get to know' and 'than we step up to Hobart'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion fails because ideas flow into one another without clear boundaries or logical transitions, creating a confusing reading experience.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors ('austraila', 'minium', 'Futhermore', 'bribane', 'residians') and awkward word choices ('residians of Hobart', 'for coffee and stuff'). The student manages to use basic topical vocabulary such as 'bar graph', 'percentages', 'fresh coffee', and 'instant coffee', but fails to demonstrate the ability to use less common lexical items accurately. The vocabulary errors cause strain for the reader and reflect a restricted expressive capability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed, overly long, run-on sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions or punctuation errors. There is a complete lack of control over complex sentence structures, and basic grammatical rules—such as subject-verb agreement, capitalization, and tense consistency—are frequently violated (e.g., 'highest reside persons in austraila went to cafe', 'they both are almost same'). Frequent errors distort the meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader throughout the text.

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